Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In my opinion which people accepeted difficult situation such as money shortage and low sallary jobs but this is not a good in other hand some people canot satisfy and they argue that they should try to better and improved this situation.

Some time when people face problems they canot satnd aganst them. some people ore unhapy for jobes but they are spent his hole life in dificulties and some time they are facing many dificult problems and they canot provided facilities to family. In may opinion they should learns new skils and try to find new jobs related skils and try to facing problems this is only way to find new jobs and and get money for spend life easy.

you should try to learns new skills and make perfect life and gives facilit

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You express a relevant opinion that people should try to improve difficult circumstances, and you give examples involving low-paid work, family needs, and learning skills. However, the response only minimally discusses the two views: accepting a bad situation is mentioned briefly, while the reasons someone might accept it are not explained. Your own position is also difficult to follow in the opening sentence, and the final line is incomplete. The ideas about learning skills and finding a better job are relevant but need explanation and specific support. The response is 135 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum. Develop both sides in separate paragraphs, state your view clearly, and explain each main point with an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the issue, the next paragraph discusses people facing difficulties, and the final line returns to advice. Some progression is visible from problems at work to learning skills and seeking a new job. However, the short paragraphs do not form a clear, complete discussion, and the final sentence is unfinished. Connections between ideas are often unclear; for example, “In may opinion” introduces advice without clearly linking it to the preceding point. The repeated use of “some people” and “and” also makes the flow mechanical. Use a clear paragraph for each view, followed by your opinion, and connect sentences with precise references and linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “money shortage,” “jobs,” “skills,” “facilities,” and “problems,” so the general subject can be recognised. There are also attempts to express useful ideas such as “find new jobs” and “spend life easy.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and often inaccurate or difficult to understand, as in “canot satnd aganst them,” “dificult problems,” and “make perfect life.” Frequent spelling errors, including “accep[e]ted,” “sallary,” and “unhapy,” further reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for discussing employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and natural word combinations. For example, use “cope with difficulties” and “improve their financial situation” rather than literal or unclear phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate several connected ideas, including that people may face problems at work and could learn skills to seek new employment. However, sentence structures are mostly simple or incomplete, and errors in sentence formation frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. The opening, “In my opinion which people accepeted difficult situation,” does not form a complete, clear sentence; “they are spent his hole life” also has incorrect verb construction and agreement. The final phrase, “and gives facilit,” is unfinished. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate forms such as “people spend” and “they should learn.” Add controlled complex sentences to explain reasons and results.

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