Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people argue that you should accept a bad situation, for example a not satisfaying job or lack of money, rather than trying to improve your situation. I believe that every time you are unhappy with something in your life, you shold always try to make it better.

There are people, who will say that they will stay with what they have, even though they are not satisfaied. They believe, that they shouldn't take risks, for example if they have a job that doesn't pay them enough, they won't take the risk to quit and look for improvement. These people are scared that if they stop with something, they might lose everything that they have. Another thing is that this job they have can give these people free time to spend with their families. There are many individuals who will prefer to be with their loved ones, rather than looking for a better job, which might take this free time away from them.

There are other types of people, like me, who will prefer to not accept their bad situation and who will choose to look for improvement. In my oppinion, if you are unhappy and unsatisfaied with something, you should try and change it. Yes, there are risks to do that, but looking for improvement is part of your personal development. Some people might say that it is possible to lose everything you have. Althouht that is true, I believe if you do what you enjoy and love, sooner or later success will come.

In coclusion, there are individuals who prefer to accept their situation and there are people who try to improve. I believe that trying to improve has many more benefits and is the right choise.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and make your own position clear from the opening: you argue that people should try to improve an unsatisfactory situation. The discussion of accepting a job focuses on avoiding risk and preserving time with family, while the opposing view is linked to personal development and the possibility of eventual success. These are relevant reasons, and the conclusion restates your preference. However, the ideas are not equally developed: the benefits and practical steps involved in seeking improvement are asserted rather than explained, and the claim that success will come “sooner or later” is broad. To strengthen the response, develop each view with a specific example or a more careful explanation of its consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The progression from reasons for accepting a situation to reasons for changing it is easy to follow, and phrases such as “Another thing” and “Although that is true” help signal relationships between ideas. This clear organisation is a strength. At times, however, linking is mechanical or repetitive, particularly through repeated references to “these people” and repeated use of “There are people.” Some transitions also connect ideas without showing their precise relationship. Use a wider range of natural links and clearer referencing, and make the connection between each reason and the paragraph’s main point more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant expressions such as “take risks,” “personal development,” and “loved ones.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “stop with something,” “look for improvement,” and “success will come.” Spelling errors—including “satisfaying,” “oppinion,” and “coclusion”—also make the writing less controlled. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your argument, but they keep the vocabulary from being consistently precise and natural. Build a bank of topic-related collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, use “seek a better-paid job” rather than “look for improvement” when discussing employment.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if they have a job that doesn’t pay them enough” and a concession beginning “Although that is true.” Most sentences communicate their meaning clearly, and the paragraphing helps the reader follow the argument. Some grammatical and punctuation errors remain. For example, “There are people, who will say” has an unnecessary comma before the relative clause, and “They believe, that” also has an unnecessary comma. The sentence beginning “Some people might say that it is possible to lose everything you have” is grammatically sound, but the surrounding sentence patterns are often similar. Practise accurate punctuation and vary clause structures while maintaining control.

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