Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Two groups of minsets exist. One believes, that we should accept bad situations, like unsatisfactory job or financial hardship. The other group thinks, we should try to make things better. In my opinion,we should find our way out to improve these situations. In this essay, I will discuss both views and defend my opinion.

There are people, who argue that we should never loose hope.I strongly agree with their point of view. Bad and unfavourable times are a part of human existance. Our life is a cycle of happiness and despair. Not every situation favours you.Only those, who are strong enough to face such obstacles succeed in life.A man should always be prepared for future stuggles. People who work and think of sloutions to get through difficult problems are welcomed by the world.This belief is why I support my opnion.

On the contrary,those who think that accepting difficult situations is the right way, do not have a strong will and ultimaltely lead to disappointment.For example, if a person is facing financial problems and he is doing nothing to make things better, it will cause more issues.Situation can be changed, if he works on double shifts or take a loan to cover his financial loss. Additionally, an unfavourable job does not mean a person should resign. We should try our best to look for a possible solution before making a final decision.

In the conclusion, I completely support the argument that we should always try our best to improve difficult situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances, and the examples of financial hardship and an unsatisfactory job are relevant to the question. However, the discussion does not fully develop both views: the paragraph presented as the first view mainly argues that people should persevere, rather than explaining why accepting a bad situation might sometimes be sensible. The opposing view is also dismissed as evidence of a “not…strong will,” which oversimplifies it instead of considering possible reasons for acceptance, such as limited options or protecting one’s wellbeing. To strengthen the response, explain the rationale behind each position, support each with a specific example, and make your own judgement more fully reasoned.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can follow your overall preference. You also use signposts such as “On the contrary” and “In the conclusion.” However, the progression between the task’s two views is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph discusses perseverance, while the second introduces acceptance but mostly argues against it. Some linking is mechanical, and the opening “Two groups…” does not establish a clear roadmap for the discussion. Build each body paragraph around one view, use transitions that accurately show the relationship between ideas, and connect examples explicitly to the point they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial hardship,” “unfavourable,” “obstacles,” and “possible solution.” This gives you enough range to communicate the main ideas, but several spelling errors and awkward or imprecise expressions make the writing less natural. Examples include “minsets,” “existance,” “stuggles,” and “sloutions”; “find our way out to improve” is also an unclear collocation. Some phrases, such as “welcomed by the world,” do not express your intended meaning precisely. Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships for discussing work, money and decision-making. More precise phrasing will make your argument easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if a person is facing financial problems…” and a clause with “before making a final decision.” These attempts show some range, but errors in sentence construction and punctuation recur. For example, “One believes, that…” and “The other group thinks, we should…” place commas incorrectly, while “if he works on double shifts or take a loan” has inconsistent verb forms. There are also missing spaces after full stops and commas, as in “hope.I” and “On the contrary,those.” Practise accurate clause joining, parallel verb forms and sentence punctuation, then proofread each sentence for these patterns.

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