Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some argue that it is best approach to accept unfavourable circumstances like job dissatisfication or insufficient finiance, while others think that individuals should make effort to make better situation. While tolerating bad times will help lower the stress, I argue that working hard to overcome such situation will increase self esteem.

It is said that it better to accpet the difficult situations because it reduces stree level in a person. When we keep on thinking about the challenging times it results in more pressure to the peace of mind. Whereby, the individual cannot takecare of themselves. For instance, a teacher is always complaining of low salary then he or she will never will have happy time in this field. However, I feel that it is not a good option to let the bad situation take lead in live.

Others believe that one should work and try hard to improve the situation instead of accpeting it because it helps boost self worth. This is beacuse when a person work on changing the situation, they believe in themselves and know their worth. Eventually, making them realize that they can do anything they want if they put their mind on it. For example, a person who wants to improve his or her money condition and starts searching for addtional job he will surely increase his self love.Therefore, I strongly think that it is always wiser to try and make the situation better.

In conclusion, although accpeting the bad times will help improve stress level, this essay will finds working on it will always result in better situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the introduction and the final body paragraph. The points about reducing stress through acceptance and building self-worth through effort are relevant, and the teacher and additional-job examples help illustrate them. This fits the descriptor because the task is covered, but some ideas are less fully developed than others. The acceptance paragraph focuses mainly on stress and does not explain when acceptance might be sensible or how it differs from giving up. The claim that searching for extra work will “surely increase his self love” also needs a clearer link to the broader issue of improving one’s circumstances. Develop each view with a more precise explanation and a balanced example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The progression from the stress-reduction argument to the self-worth argument is easy to follow, and signposts such as “For instance,” “However,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, connections are occasionally mechanical or unclear: “Whereby” does not form a complete link to the preceding sentence, and “Eventually, making them realize…” is a fragment rather than a smoothly connected result. The conclusion also repeats the main position without fully resolving the contrast. Use linking expressions that show the exact relationship between ideas, and make sure each paragraph develops one connected line of reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unfavourable circumstances,” “challenging times,” “salary,” and “self worth.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the issue beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors reduce precision, such as “dissatisfication,” “insufficient finiance,” “make better situation,” and “money condition.” Some phrases, including “increase his self love,” do not express the intended idea naturally. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main argument, but they make parts of it less clear and fluent. Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; prefer natural phrases such as “financial difficulties” and “improve one’s circumstances.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “While tolerating bad times…” and conditional reasoning with “When we keep on thinking…”. The main ideas are generally understandable, which is consistent with this level. Some errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation remain. For example, “it better to accept” is missing a verb, “a person work” has incorrect agreement, and “Eventually, making them realize…” is an incomplete sentence. In “he or she will never will have,” the verb phrase is incorrectly formed. Improve accuracy by checking that every sentence has a complete main clause, matching subjects and verbs, and using one correct auxiliary construction. Continue practising complex sentences, but prioritise control over adding more clauses.

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