Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Today,some people accept a bad situation,like unhappy job or less money. Some people don't accept this and try to improve their situations.My opinion is don't accept bad situation try to improve your way of live. In this essay i explain my opinion with examples.

Firstly, some people thing the unsatisfactory job or less money is only their option. But in real if they try there were many oppertointy. In my thought they were wrong if they accept this. They need to improve there lifestyle by not accept bad situations.

Some other people argue it is better to improve situations like this.The argue of people was right if you don't try to improve your situation so you not improve your lifestyle. I always prefer to improve our current situation.

On the other hand the people who said accept bad situation for some time is also right . They are right because for family matters some time is better to do something and accept unhappy job and also for shortage of money. But its not mean that you don't try to improve your living ways.

In the end, after discuss the both view my opinion was that both was right but for some time. For example if you don't have a your satisfactory job but you have family so you need money.In this situation and time first view was right. But other view was also right but after your situation was good. Both peoples view was right but for their time and situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a personal preference for improving a difficult situation, while also recognising that accepting a job temporarily may be necessary for family or financial reasons. These points are relevant, but the discussion is only partly developed: the first view is described briefly, and the reasons for trying to improve circumstances are repeated rather than supported with a specific example or explanation. Your conclusion also shifts from preferring improvement to saying that both views are right depending on the situation, so your position is not fully consistent. To strengthen the response, explain each view with a distinct reason or example, then make clear how your final judgement relates to your initial opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “On the other hand” and “In the end” help identify the stages of the discussion. However, the overall progression is not always clear: the paragraph beginning “Some other people argue” moves between supporting improvement and accepting a bad situation, and the conclusion repeats the idea that both views are right without clearly resolving the discussion. Linking phrases are sometimes mechanical, while references such as “they” and “this situation” can be unclear. Organise the two viewpoints in separate, focused paragraphs, use pronouns only when their reference is unmistakable, and make the conclusion directly restate your considered position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “family matters” and “improve your lifestyle.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, spelling and word-form errors make parts less clear, such as “thing” for “think,” “oppertointy,” “living ways” and “both peoples view.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “less money” and “improve your way of live.” Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise collocations would make your ideas easier to follow without changing their meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “if you don't try to improve your situation so you not improve your lifestyle.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “my opinion was that both was right” has agreement and tense problems, while “if you don't have a your satisfactory job” contains an incorrect article pattern. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, as in “Today,some” and “right .” Practise building accurate sentences with “if” clauses and past or present forms, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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