Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people think that it is better to accept a difficult situation such as a boring a job or lack of money while other belive that people should try to change it this easy will discuss both veiw and i will argue that trying to imreove that situation is generally the better approach

On the one hand accepting a bad satuation can bring peace of mind constantly fighting again problem can cause streesand disapoimtment especially when the situation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the two broad positions—accepting a difficult situation and trying to change it—and state that improvement is generally preferable. However, the response does not develop either view: the point that acceptance can bring “peace of mind” is only briefly introduced, and the sentence ends before explaining when or why this might be true. The opposing view and your own position receive no supporting reasons or examples, so the task is addressed only minimally. The response also contains 78 words, below the required 250, which leaves the discussion substantially incomplete. To improve, explain both perspectives with specific reasons or examples, then make your opinion clear and support it throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces both views, and “On the one hand” signals the start of a discussion of acceptance. The reader can also identify your intended position in the introduction. However, the response stops during the first supporting point, so there is no progression to the other view or a conclusion. Several ideas are crowded into the opening sentence, and the linking phrase “while other believe” does not clearly connect the contrast because the sentence lacks effective punctuation. Develop separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and use clear links between complete ideas. This would build on the initial organisational signals already present.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “difficult situation,” “lack of money,” “accept,” and “peace of mind.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is narrow because the response is very short, and several spelling errors—such as “belive,” “veiw,” “satuation,” and “disapoimtment”—make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Some phrasing is also imprecise, such as “fighting again problem.” Proofread carefully and build a wider set of topic-specific expressions for discussing financial hardship, job dissatisfaction, and practical change. More accurate word forms and collocations would make your ideas clearer and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to use a complex contrast in the opening sentence and a subordinate clause in “constantly fighting … can cause…,” showing some awareness of sentence variety. However, control is inconsistent. The opening is a run-on sentence joining several clauses without suitable punctuation, and the final sentence is incomplete, ending with “especially when the situation.” There are also missing or incorrect grammatical forms, including “a boring a job,” “other believe,” and “i will argue.” These problems make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Use shorter, complete sentences first, checking articles, subject–verb agreement, capitalisation, and punctuation; then add complex clauses only when their structure is complete.

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