Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this era, people face many challenges in their daily lives. while, some argue that it is best to accept bad situation and become happy with this, others think that everyone should improve these situations. This essay will discuss both views and my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, there are many reasons why people think that accepting a difficult situation is good approach. The main point is that it can be risky for them. To explain it, sometime people do not want to change their jobs because they have stability and security in their current jobs. So, there is no guarantee that they can get successful job and leaving. Additionally, they want to stable their financial situation because, job changing is time consuming and stressful that is why why people accept unsatisfactory jobs without facing and difficulties.

On the other hand, there are those who think it is good to change jobs. The first point is , for their satisfaction they change their bad situations at work, Due to they want to enjoy at their working place and feel stress free with this they do their work by their heart. As a result, they balance their lives because they do not have to take stress about their job and money. Moreover, people who work to change their situations they are more skilled like they do not only have more confidence to take difficult decisions but, they also have more experience than others.

In my opinion, I think that people do not accept bad situations and shortage of money because, if they change their jobs then then get satisfaction and enjoy their lives.

In conclusion, although some people accepting their bad situations but, I thing it is good to make these situations better for their personal growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your own preference: the first body paragraph explains why people may value job security, while the next presents satisfaction, reduced stress and personal development as reasons to seek change. This is relevant to the question, but the discussion remains general and some points are not fully explained. For example, the claim that changing situations makes people “more skilled” is asserted without showing how this happens, and the opinion focuses mainly on changing jobs rather than also considering a shortage of money. Your position is present, but “I think that people do not accept bad situations” is broad and does not clearly acknowledge when acceptance might be sensible. Develop each reason with a specific explanation and make your overall position more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the discussion. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear, and several sentences contain ideas that do not link smoothly. For instance, the explanation beginning “Additionally, they want to stable their financial situation” is difficult to follow, while “As a result” does not clearly show how changing jobs leads to balancing one’s life. The conclusion also repeats the opinion rather than drawing the discussion together. Use linking phrases only where the relationship is clear, and organise each body paragraph around a reason followed by its explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “stability and security,” “satisfaction,” “stress” and “personal growth.” There are also attempts at less basic expressions, such as “financial situation” and “difficult decisions.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “stable their financial situation,” “successful job,” “enjoy at their working place” and “do their work by their heart.” Repetition of “situations,” “jobs” and “change” also limits precision. Build a bank of natural phrases for employment and financial circumstances, and check whether verbs and adjectives commonly combine with the nouns you use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “that,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “there is no guarantee that they can get successful job and leaving” has an incomplete, unbalanced structure, while “Due to they want to enjoy…” uses an incorrect clause pattern. There are also recurring errors with articles, verb forms and agreement, as in “accepting a difficult situation is good approach” and “some people accepting their bad situations.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, including a lowercase “while” after a full stop and commas that interrupt clauses. Practise accurate sentence patterns before adding more complexity.

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