Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is a growing concern that some people believe that it is better to accept bad situation while other believe that it is best to try and improve such situations. In this essay, I will examine both views and explain why it is important to accept bad situation or not. There are a lot of people in the world who are doing very unstale jobs or the job is either not good or either they are getting low salary, but the reason they are doing this kind of job is their financial need. While if salary of the job is low then we should try our best to increase the salary but if the attitude of the boss is not good then we should also try our best so then they can improve there behaviour with their clients. For instance there are a lot of educational institutes where the behaviour of the principle with their teachers is not good on daily basis so it is essential to try and talk to them so that they can improve their beaviour.

From my prespectives there are two kinds of scenarios.one is that sometimes we should be patient over any thing else in our life either that is not good for us because sometimes it brings good and better results. While the 2nd scenaro is that is something is disturbing your piece of mind then it is better to change that situation rather than to bear it. So it totally depends on the circumstances sometimes some bad situations brings good results while sometimes it is better to improve those situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides by discussing accepting an unsatisfactory job for financial reasons and trying to improve pay or a manager’s behaviour. Your final point—that the right response depends on the circumstances—also gives a general opinion. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons for accepting a bad situation are not explored beyond financial need, and the case for changing it is mostly presented as advice rather than developed argument. The opening says you will explain why it is important to accept a bad situation “or not,” which leaves your position uncertain. State your view clearly and support each side with fuller explanations or relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable opening, a discussion of workplace situations, and a concluding paragraph, so the reader can recognise its broad structure. However, progression between ideas is limited: the first body paragraph moves from low pay to a boss’s attitude and then to school principals without clearly connecting these points. Linking words such as “While,” “but,” and “So” are used, but some relationships are unclear or repetitive. The second paragraph also combines two scenarios and the conclusion without a clear separation of the opposing views. Organise the essay into distinct paragraphs for acceptance, improvement, and your opinion, and use references and transitions that make the relationship between each point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “financial need,” “low salary,” “attitude,” and “circumstances,” and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “bad situation” and “try our best.” There are also noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems, such as “unstale jobs,” “piece of mind” for “peace of mind,” and “principle” when referring to a school leader. These can make the reader pause or infer your intended meaning. Build a more precise set of expressions for employment and decision-making, and check spelling and common word partnerships before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences using contrast and condition, for example, “While if salary of the job is low then we should try our best…” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. Examples include “some people believe … other believe,” “if salary … is low,” and “sometimes some bad situations brings good results,” which show problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “accept bad situation” and “scenarios.one.” Use shorter, complete sentences when needed, then practise combining them with accurate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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