Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, this is an important necessary issue that has consideable attention. People have different viewsabout thiss matter. This essay will discuss the main arguments and present my opinion in an analytical way. Some individuals argue that it is good to accept a bad condition, such as an dissapoininting job or shortage of income. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such circumstances. In my opinion, one man change the plan and though the diffferent perspectives.

On the one hand, some persons that happy in the bad situation and thanked for the god. These are many bad circumstances, he was doing a poor jobs with low salary. The income was not good enough. Poor person are also enjoy the job and not the drop opportunity in this time. For example, there are many humans are also developed in the factory and they live on their house very hard. Some of the person are always happy and enjoy the every moment for the life. There are the many workers that perform the work in the factory and they want to the largest salary.

On the other hand, others person argue that it is better to try the improve your conditions. One person that try the beneficial jobs finally the resulted are also successfully aim. In my opinion, every humans has the work highly and proved your taught. All workers should provide the heavily struggle and latest the final position of the income of good, full of members in the society are happily and enjoy the happy life. Different efforts are also proved your thinking and the opportunity is beneficial. Experiences are also high because its depends on the in salary.

In conclusion, are also the advice in all the people of the society had the works of highly. I hope in the future all the humans of salaru are largest happy and enjoy the every life with moment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce both views and use a basic essay structure, with separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand.” However, the discussion only minimally answers the question because the reasons for accepting a bad situation and for trying to improve it are not clearly explained or supported. Examples about factory workers and low salaries are difficult to interpret, and the final paragraph does not clearly state a reasoned personal opinion. The sentence “In my opinion, one man change the plan and though the different perspectives” does not establish a clear position. To strengthen the response, explain why someone might accept difficult circumstances, why others might seek change, and state your own view directly, supporting each point with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help identify the intended structure. However, the ideas within paragraphs do not progress clearly: the first body paragraph moves from gratitude to low income, factory work, and wanting a larger salary without showing how these points connect. The second paragraph similarly shifts among effort, jobs, income, and experience. Some linking phrases are used mechanically, and references such as “these” and “they” do not always make clear who or what is meant. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of income,” “circumstances,” “salary,” and “opportunity,” and you use some topic-related terms across the response. However, the range is basic and repetitive, while frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make several ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “consid[e]able,” “dissapoininting,” and “diffferent,” as well as unnatural phrases such as “the largest salary” and “proved your taught.” Some expressions appear to be chosen without a clear meaning in context, particularly “the final position of the income.” Build a smaller set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling, word forms, and collocations so that your intended meaning is clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentence forms, and the response is divided into paragraphs. However, grammatical control is weak: errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and verb forms occur frequently and sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “some persons that happy” lacks a finite verb, while “Poor person are also enjoy the job” combines incompatible verb forms and has incorrect agreement. “Every humans has” also shows a mismatch between the subject and verb. Many sentences rely on incomplete or confusing patterns, so the reader must work to infer the intended message. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check that every sentence has a clear subject and verb and that these agree.

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