Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people think that it is better to accept bad situation, for example, unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. On the other hand, some believe that it is better to try and improve the situations. In my opinion, people should make practical efforts to improve the circumstances instead of accepting an unsatisfactory job permanently. The details of both viewers are given in the following paragraphs.

On the one hand, people often accept the bad situation in terms of an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money because they do not have enough resources to fulfill the daily expenditures of their family. Furthermore, the do not take risk of left the available job because they do not sure about the new opportunity of employment. Therefore, they try to be satisfied with available resources and accept the current circumstances.

On the other hand, some people do not accept the bad situation and try to improve the circumstances because they consider that the better educational skills can make the situation good. I also strongly believe that, by getting higher education and vocational education , there may be better employment opportunities which can raise the income level of the individuals. Furthermore, good job is also necessary for mental satisfaction which play a vital role towards sound body of the people. Therefore, people try to improve their capabilities by learning new skills and getting higher education in order to improve situations.

In conclusion, one group of the people believe that to accept bad situation in terms of an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money because they have to fulfill the needs of their family. Therefore, they do not risk of loosing job. The group of viewers believe that it is better to improve the situation by improving new skills and by getting good education which may provide more employment opportunities. I also agree with the second group of viewers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state your own position clearly: you favour making practical efforts to improve circumstances, and you reaffirm this in the conclusion. The discussion is relevant, especially the point that people may stay in a job because they need to support their families and are uncertain about finding another opportunity. The case for improvement is also supported with education, skills and better employment prospects. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the reasons for accepting a bad situation receive less explanation, and the benefits of education are presented quite generally. To strengthen the response, explain more fully why accepting a difficult situation can sometimes be sensible, and add a specific example or qualification to support your preferred view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that restates your opinion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow. However, the organisation is somewhat mechanical, and several ideas are linked mainly through repeated “Furthermore” and “Therefore.” The conclusion also repeats much of the introduction and body rather than drawing the discussion together. Some references are unclear, as in “The group of viewers,” which does not identify the group naturally. Use a wider range of linking methods, make references more precise, and connect each supporting point explicitly to the paragraph’s main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “daily expenditures,” “employment opportunities,” “income level,” and “mental satisfaction.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the response shows some willingness to use more specific language than basic everyday terms. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “details of both viewers,” “the better educational skills,” and “improving new skills.” There is also repetition of “situation,” “improve,” and “people,” which limits flexibility. Aim for more natural combinations and vary repeated terms; for example, use “the two perspectives,” “developing stronger qualifications,” and “acquiring new skills.” Check spelling and word forms as well, including “losing” rather than “loosing.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” and most of the meaning remains clear. Some sentences are controlled, such as “Therefore, they try to be satisfied with available resources and accept the current circumstances.” However, there are some errors in articles, verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. Examples include “accept bad situation,” “they do not take risk of left,” “they do not sure,” and “which play a vital role.” These should be revised to forms such as “accept a bad situation,” “they do not take the risk of leaving,” “they are not sure,” and “which plays a vital role.” Practise checking subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, while continuing to use complex sentences accurately.

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