Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people think that to accept a bad situation is best, like as an unsatisfactory job or money problem. Some prepective that it is good to try and more improve such situations.

However, in the life Mary hardels waiting of you so when a difficulty came to a person the best option is he face the problem not to run into the bad situation because this problem learn may things and create confidence and maturity in person. For instance in covid 19, 10 lake employees lossed their jobs, some person face this situation and create our small business like gloves and leather work our home even provide some jobs and many people stayed at home and not face any difficulty so they just waste our the time.

Moreover, many people believe that the best option is to accept a bad situation because mostly people go to depression after any difficulty they thought they have lost all the wealth our job. For example, In COVID-19, 12.5 million medicines sold regularly in my country why people brought medicine because they not trust god , when Allah said, you pray to our life and work, I will you give all things, so why we heavy depression UpTo our. Life is not the name of sadness, depression and rudeness life is the name of happiness and joyfulness.

To conclusion, my opinion sometimes is people accept the bad suition but, I think people should better to try and improve such situations because they learn many new experience, confidence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the conclusion, and you include examples related to job losses and people experiencing depression. However, the discussion of the two views is uneven and only partly addresses the question. The first body paragraph mainly argues that hardship can build confidence and lead to new businesses, while the opposing view is linked to depression and religious beliefs rather than clearly explaining why accepting a situation may sometimes be sensible. Several claims, such as the figures about medicines, are not clearly connected to the argument. Develop both positions with relevant reasons and explain how each example supports them; state your opinion clearly from the introduction onward.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “However,” “Moreover” and “To conclusion” show an attempt to organise the discussion. The paragraphs also broadly separate the two viewpoints. However, progression within them is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from facing problems to COVID-related job losses and then to people staying at home, without clearly linking each point. The second shifts from depression to medicine sales and religious advice. Some connections are unclear, and the conclusion does not neatly summarise the two views. Use a clear topic sentence in each paragraph, develop one main idea at a time, and make references between sentences explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “confidence,” “maturity,” “depression” and “small business.” These choices show an effort to discuss work, hardship and emotional effects. However, the range is limited and many word choices, spellings or combinations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “prepective,” “Mary hardels,” “lossed their jobs,” “heavy depression” and “bad suition.” Some phrases, such as “create our small business,” are also not natural in this context. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms and collocations. Prefer precise, familiar expressions over ambitious wording that obscures your point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional-style explanation beginning “when a difficulty came to a person” and a reason clause with “because.” This shows some effort to connect ideas rather than relying only on short statements. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation frequently make the message hard to follow. For example, “this problem learn may things” and “I will you give all things” do not form clear grammatical clauses; “some person face this situation” also has agreement and verb-form problems. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check tense consistency and punctuation when joining clauses.

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