Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

While some feels that it is better for them to keep working on the position not happy with and earn less, others prefer to put their hundered and solve this issue. In this essay i will discuss both views and explain why i think it is better to bring changes to satisfy ourselves with our job and income.

Human like to stay in their comfortzones. employees how prefer to tolerate the less salary and more job presure are afraiding of lossing their job and not be able to find a better job, as a result they will always stay in same position and they cannot brings changes in their lives and would suffer all the time.

on the other hand, some people who they want to find a way to go out of these problems by taking risk. because they already suffer and it will put their life and work balance under pressure. in addition they will try their best to find a bitter job. maybe he face alot of problems for awhile, but, he believes he can ouvercome it soon. which may lead to solve it and stay in better situation after that

In my opinion, suffering more for somedays until finding a solution is better than countinuing to accept the bad situation for lifelong. for instance my causin had an ordinary job for longtime and always under work pressure and his income was not sufficient for his expenses. then he decided to change his work. he was unemployed for 2 months, then after that he was hired in a better company with approximately double salary. as a result he have an happy life for now with better life and work balance.

in conclusion i discussed both side of arguments and explained we it is better to take a risk and bring changes to stop bad situation and have happy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve a difficult situation, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The example about your cousin also supports your opinion with a relevant outcome. However, the discussion is uneven: the reasons for accepting a bad situation are mainly reduced to fear of losing a job, while the benefits and risks of making a change are only briefly explained. The example illustrates one successful case but does not explore why taking a risk may be worthwhile more generally. Develop both sides with fuller explanations and make the reasoning behind your position more explicit to give the response greater depth.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Basic signposting such as “on the other hand,” “in addition,” and “in conclusion” helps readers follow the main direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the second body paragraph moves from taking risks to work-life balance and then to finding a better job without clearly connecting these points. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, and references such as “it” and “these problems” are not always precise. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence, using transitions that show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “comfort zones,” “work pressure,” “income,” “take a risk,” and “work-life balance.” These choices make the general argument understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to interpret, such as “put their hundered,” “find a bitter job,” and “stop bad situation.” Spelling errors, including “afraiding,” “lossing,” and “ou vercome,” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn common phrases for employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions would help you explain the contrast between tolerating difficulties and actively seeking improvement.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a conditional idea in “if he face alot of problems for awhile” and a result clause beginning “which may lead to solve it.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently enough to make some ideas harder to follow. For example, “employees how prefer” has an incorrect relative form, “they cannot brings changes” has faulty verb agreement, and “he have an happy life” contains errors in both agreement and article use. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected subordinate clause before adding more complexity.

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