Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Whether people should accept unsatisfactory job due to money or improve his condition by continously efforts. This essay will discuss both view and i firmly believe that people should work for better job consistently.

On the one hand, people choose a job that is not match their qualification. They face financial crisis in life, so it create difficulties to fullfil their basic need. They struggle to fulfil their daily expenses. The situation allow them to join a unsatisfactory job. due to unwanted job, they face mental issues because they are not interested in work. A best example to illustrates this point of view is that, regardless of business degree, a person is forced to continue as a sales man. This experiences influences person's mental condition, but he is able of fulfil their daily expenses and support his family. Therfore, although unsatisfactory job impacts person's mental health, it gives opportunities to support family.

On the other hand, some people advocate that people should not go for unwanted job. despite of unemployment, people do not loss hope and consistantly pursue a good job that matches his interest. After facing rejection, people should give up their efforts. the reason behind that it allow people face bad situation and motivated them to prevant it. Consequently, consistant work give better option to people, it also make them confidence and hardworker. It also able them to overcome challenges.

In conclusion, under consideration of abovemention arguements, I firmly believe that poeple should join unsatisfactory job, beacuse it allow people to fulfil their basic needs of life and support their family, although it create stress.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a clear final preference for accepting an unsatisfactory job, supported by the point that it provides income for basic needs and family support. The example of a business graduate working in sales also helps illustrate the first view. However, the opening says you firmly believe people should work for a better job, while the conclusion supports taking the unsatisfactory job; this makes your position inconsistent. The second view is also not explained clearly: the sentence “After facing rejection, people should give up their efforts” contradicts the argument that they should keep trying. Develop each view with a clear explanation and ensure your opinion remains consistent from introduction to conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or connected unclearly. For example, the second body paragraph moves from pursuing a suitable job to giving up after rejection, then to being motivated to prevent a bad situation. The conclusion also conflicts with the position stated in the introduction. Use clearer cause-and-effect links, avoid repeating the same point, and make sure each paragraph develops one consistent line of reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial crisis,” “basic needs,” “mental issues,” “rejection,” and “overcome challenges.” These expressions allow you to discuss financial pressure and the effects of work. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts of the response less clear, such as “a job that is not match their qualification,” “sales man,” “consistantly,” and “prevent it.” Some phrases are also imprecise, including “a best example to illustrates this point of view.” Aim to use accurate, natural combinations of words and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary for employment, financial security, and career development would help express your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a concession in “although unsatisfactory job impacts person's mental health” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. Examples include “Whether people should accept unsatisfactory job,” “it create difficulties,” and “This experiences influences person's mental condition.” These show problems with sentence formation, subject–verb agreement, articles, and singular/plural forms. The sentence “After facing rejection, people should give up their efforts” is grammatically formed but does not express the intended argument clearly in context. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and articles before submitting.

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