Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It is increasingly argued that harmful situation is good to approve by it, such as an unsatisfactory employes or shortage of financial difficulties. And some people believe that it is best to experiment and enhance such as situations. I strongly with this view, In my opinion, some individuals accept bad situation, they make your future career.
On one hand, some individual believe that they approve there awful situation. This is because they can abtain our bad situation, if they pass they critical situation, they will make your best career, constantly some people cannot offort harmful situation because before they should not face chalenge in our life, this individual live in your home and after that they will go your that may not affort this jobs. For example my friend it is mamy dady boy but when face to more responsibility he was extremly affriad. How i can do it. As a result he learn the world some thing.
On the other hands, there are several affect to the best to try and improve your situaion. This is because when you begin the low step, if you will reach your best way. first you start a little busniss and day to day you enhance your ability and your work one day is come in you will a big man your life. In my opinion you th start short store but you can do it.
In conclusion, some people belive that it is the best to accept a harmful situation, in my opinion when you start some work you will make a good man so thats why some thing do
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You attempt to discuss both views and state a preference for improving difficult circumstances, especially through the example of starting a small business. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening says “I strongly with this view” but then suggests that accepting a bad situation can shape a career, while the conclusion is difficult to interpret. The view in favour of acceptance is also only partly explained; the example about your friend facing responsibility does not clearly show why accepting a bad situation is beneficial. To strengthen the response, explain each side directly, develop relevant examples, and state your own position consistently. The response meets the required length; the eight words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On one hand” and “On the other hands,” and a conclusion, so there is an attempt at an overall essay structure. The two main views are also placed in separate paragraphs. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear relationships, as in the long sentence about people facing a critical situation and their future work. Some linking expressions are inaccurate or mechanical, and references such as “they,” “your,” and “this individual” make it unclear who is being discussed. Use shorter, logically connected sentences, make pronoun references explicit, and ensure each paragraph develops one central point before moving to an example.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory,” “shortage,” “responsibility,” and “improve,” and you attempt to discuss work and financial circumstances. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate word choices or collocations strain the reader’s understanding. For example, “harmful situation is good to approve by it” does not express the intended idea, and “a big man your life” is unclear. There are also spelling and word-form problems, such as “offort,” “busniss,” and “situiaon.” Build a more reliable set of phrases for discussing acceptance, change, employment, and financial hardship, and check spelling and collocations when editing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt some longer sentences and use basic structures to introduce reasons and examples, but grammatical control is very limited and errors frequently make meaning difficult to recover. Examples include “I strongly with this view,” “if they pass they critical situation,” and “one day is come in you will a big man,” where verb forms, sentence structure, and agreement are not controlled. Articles, pronouns, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “some individual believe” and the run-on sentence beginning “This is because.” Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear clauses using “because,” “if,” and “when.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms in every sentence.
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