Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It comes down to personal preference,some citizens argue that it is best to accept worst situation.For instance,unsatiesfied occupation or lack of money.While others belive that it is better to try and improve these situations.While I agree with the second opinion,that it is best to overcome the situation by improving.

There are some type of people who belive that it is better to accept a bad situation,they accept their luck and do not try to move on from this situation.Some times they also think that taking risks may lead them to more danger,so they do not try to improve there situations.For example,a person who lose his businees for a reason, accepts his situation and do not try to improve,so he stucks in that situation forever.

However, I strongly agree with the second opinion,that it is better to try again and improve themselves.I think every failing has a lesson,we have to learn from the mistakes and improve them.Individuals who learns from the failure is always better than who is accepting his bad situation.A person who learn from failure and improve themselve can get success,and achive success in their long run.For instance,a person who is at a unsatiesfied job ,which he might think that he cannot grow his career should change his occupation and improve himself to get a better oportunity.

To sum up,at the end of the day,a person should learn from a bad situation and improve himself to be better in his future.while accepting such worst situations a person cannot be sucess in his life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve a bad situation, supported by examples about a failed business and an unsatisfactory job. However, the discussion is limited: the reasons for accepting difficult circumstances are only briefly explained, and the examples are not developed enough to show their consequences in detail. The conclusion repeats your position rather than adding a final insight. The response also contains 246 words, so it is four words below the required minimum; the eight words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each side with a fuller explanation and ensure the response meets the minimum length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting acceptance, a paragraph supporting improvement, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “However,” “For example,” and “To sum up” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive, particularly the repeated references to accepting or improving a situation, and several ideas are joined in long, awkward sentences. The opening also uses “While” twice in close succession, which makes the relationship between ideas unclear. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it, using linking expressions selectively and making references between sentences clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “taking risks,” “learn from the mistakes,” “failure,” and “career,” so the reader can understand your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “situation,” “improve,” and “success.” Noticeable spelling errors such as “unsatiesfied,” “belive,” “businees,” and “oportunity” reduce accuracy and can distract the reader. Some combinations are also unnatural, for example “accept worst situation” and “grow his career.” Build a wider set of accurate expressions for discussing setbacks and choices, and check spelling and collocations carefully during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “who” and “which,” and your overall meaning is generally recoverable. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “a person who lose” should use a singular verb, while “he stucks” needs a different verb construction; “Individuals who learns” also has a subject–verb agreement error. The opening contains comma splices and sentence fragments, such as “For instance, unsatiesfied occupation or lack of money.” Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then check agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation.

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