Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individual argue that it is best to accept a worse situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of amount. Other believe that it is better to try and traet well such situations. I stand with second opinion. Which is more effective and change that situation permenantly.

On the one hand, some people are accept their poor situation and not try to move up. Moreover they are facing many problem likewise shortage of money, low job satisfaction and many more. They can solve that situation and solve their problem with different mindset and apporch.

On the other hand,many people are doing hard work and thing out of the box which could change their situation. It would benificial their family as well as number of people. For example such engineer work in company and that company not provide sufficient money to survive. Consequently, they left job and start own firm which are beificial and also good for many affiliated people.

Moreover, I believe that situation can be change if the person do hard work with proper planning and mindset, such are demotive for that situation which are not good things. success need some sacrifice and constant work on their dream. Beside of some are left and not thing about in different way and they not overcome that situation.

In conclusion, I argue that people know all things Althogh they are not do hard work and left the situation as it is. Consequently they face many isssue. furthermore, otherside people do hard work and change their situation which is good for everyone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a preference in “I stand with second opinion,” so the reader can identify your general position. The example of an engineer leaving an underpaid job to start a firm is relevant and begins to explain how change may benefit others. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons for accepting a difficult situation are not really explained, and the first body paragraph shifts quickly from describing acceptance to saying people can solve their problems. Your own view is repeated, but claims such as “success need some sacrifice” are not developed with clear reasoning or support. To strengthen the response, explain why some people choose acceptance, then develop and support your preferred approach with a more precise example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs introduced by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” a further paragraph for your opinion, and a conclusion. These markers help distinguish the two views. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from people accepting their situation to saying they can solve it, without explaining the connection. The final opinion paragraph repeats ideas about hard work and overcoming difficulties, while the conclusion introduces “people know all things” without a clear link to the preceding argument. Some linking expressions, including “Moreover,” “Consequently,” and “Furthermore,” feel repetitive or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “job satisfaction,” “shortage of money,” “proper planning,” and “sacrifice.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts difficult to interpret, such as “shortage of amount,” “traet well,” “thing out of the box,” and “demotive.” There are also repeated general terms such as “situation,” “people,” and “hard work,” which reduce precision. Aim to use accurate collocations and vary key words: for instance, describe an “unsatisfactory situation” or “financial hardship,” and explain whether people “accept” or “try to improve” their circumstances. Proofreading spelling and word forms would also make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “if the person do hard work with proper planning and mindset.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, and verb forms frequently make the reader pause. Examples include “some people are accept,” “Other believe,” “the person do,” and “situation can be change.” The opening fragment “Which is more effective and change that situation permenantly” is not a complete sentence, and the final paragraph contains several clauses joined without clear grammatical structure. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb patterns—for example, “some people accept” and “the situation can be changed.” More accurate control of these basic patterns will make your arguments easier to follow.

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