Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

For people, few situations are more disappointed than critical situation, such as shortage of money or unsatisfactory job. In many developed and developing countries, a substantial amount of effort and held campaign on how to handle bad situations, as often they need to notice people 's economical situation, living standard, mental health issues and so on. Many would agree that contemporary society has nearly transcended its traditional boundary and will soon become boundless in its pursuit of best method to handle critical situations. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that everybody need to find a way to improve their bad situations, should need take to effective steps based on situations.

Naturally, bad and good situations, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, are considered as part of life. Moreover, it demonstrates unparalleled problem for people, disappointing and frustrating individuals in every time until solve this situations. People need to mental and physical good health though solving this situation, that's why they need to less panicked in this situations. If individuals are less panicked or considered that it is a part life alike, then many people stand to mental benefits significantly.

On the other hand, If people all time consider the bad situation is a part of life and not try to remove it, then nations will be rely on big problem. This can be rise as a barrier to elevate modern living standers. For instance, people of China and Japan are always ready to mentally solve every bad situations but they not panicked with it rather they solve bad situation with take long time and patiance.

However every one need to accept that bad situation is a part of life and take necessary step to solve this situation but not panicked.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that people should improve their situations, the arguments lack specific, well-developed examples. For instance, the reference to China and Japan is vague and does not clearly explain how their approach supports your argument. The introduction is also slightly confusing due to word choice issues, which makes the initial position less clear. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained idea supported by a concrete example or logical reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Moreover, it demonstrates unparalleled problem' and 'that's why they need to less panicked' show a lack of control over linking words and referencing. Some sentences are disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel repetitive. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') more naturally and ensure that pronouns clearly refer back to the intended nouns.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'disappointed' instead of 'disappointing', 'held campaign' instead of 'campaigns are held', and 'mental benefits' instead of 'mental health benefits'. Some phrases are awkward, such as 'transcended its traditional boundary'. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary rather than relying on simple or incorrectly used words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('everybody need to', 'nations will be rely'), incorrect verb forms ('should need take to effective steps'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring that verb tenses are used consistently throughout the text.

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