Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
some people think that doing unsatisfied job is butter to do nothing in their life and some think that it is good to try again for satisfied job.People think that unsatisfied job like the job they dont according to their education level is beneficial way earn money while other think that try to improve your skills and gain high knowledge is more reliable.In my understanding,people should doing job whatever the company they offered.
On the one hand,some people believe that doing unsatisfied job is better in the shortage of money The shortage of money is one of the predominant dilemma in this generation. For instance,In pakistan most of the people are accepted unsatisfied job due to the shortage of money,However doing difffernt types of jobs also build confident in your daily life .Moreover for living in the today generation people are needed money .Consequence, people should accept the unsatisfied job.
On the other hand some people argue that people should learn specific skill and gain high knowledge instead of doing unsatisfied job. For example,karachi is the most commercial city in pakistan , people are going to pakistan for gain high knowledge and learning skills.Moreover government should provide facility to the remote areas.In addition,if you learn more skills and increase knowledge your chances is automaticlly close to the reliable job. In my opinion, dong different types of jobs is better then try again and again.
Nowadays competiton is so high , finding a satisfied job is so difficult and companes also wants experiences . The other thing is doing jobs in the different organisation is effective,you can build contacts and confidents with earn the money.In my perspective ,doing unsatisfied job is better way to earn money confident and skills.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the argument regarding 'shortage of money' is repetitive, and the explanation of why one should 'accept the unsatisfied job' lacks depth. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are somewhat superficial and rely on generalisations. To improve, you should provide more specific examples or logical reasoning to support your claims rather than repeating the same points about money and confidence. The conclusion is consistent with the body paragraphs, but the overall task response would benefit from more thorough exploration of the implications of each viewpoint.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, the use of 'Consequence' as a transition is grammatically incorrect, and 'The other thing is' is too informal for an academic essay. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs, the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the internal structure of paragraphs could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly rather than relying on simple transitions like 'Moreover' and 'In addition'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms such as 'unsatisfied job' (which should be 'unsatisfying' or 'unfulfilling') and 'gain high knowledge'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'doing job' instead of 'taking a job' or 'working'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate a higher level of precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more sophisticated synonyms and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form and context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people are needed money'), article usage (e.g., 'in the today generation'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'your chances is automaticlly close to the reliable job'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. While you attempt to use some complex ideas, the execution is often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence accuracy, such as correct verb tenses and pluralisation, will significantly improve your score. You should also proofread to catch simple errors like 'companes' and 'confidents'.
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