Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the competitive world, many individual say that people should believe to difficult situation. While other believe that people should analysised the mistake and do work to make it good situation. By my perspective,

I think people should don't accept the situation and do hardwork to improve that mistake.

Firstly, people who are not financely stable amd sometime the difficultly was arrived like medical emergency or education fees or something else. That time people make sure to accept situation and handle it with thier patience and knowledge. Sometime we have to accept it all bad situation and passes with from that bad phase. For example, according to survey of India 2020, so many people die dur to corona diseases and every and each people have to accept that bad situation . So much population was die that time which is very bad and no body can do anything that time so we to phase that time.

But , sometimes people who are in bad situation they should not be give up and accept the situation. In fact, they should fine out the mistake and should be make it better compared to past . By adapting this method so many problems can be solved .For example, survey of India tata company, they phase difficultly in tata steel company in 2010 . That time they never give up and find the problem and work on it . And they can slove tha problem by analysis it .

In conclusion, so many persons believe acceptance of situation is the best thing .while other argued that acceptance of situation is not the solution so people do hardwork on it and make it good. By my point of view , accepting the situation is not good but do research on problem is the best way to make good situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the COVID-19 pandemic and the Tata Steel example are somewhat underdeveloped and lack a clear logical connection to the prompt's core theme of personal agency versus acceptance. While the position is consistent, the supporting examples are vague and do not fully explore the complexities of the topic. To improve, you should focus on providing more detailed explanations of why one approach is superior to the other, rather than relying on brief, anecdotal references.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'By my perspective', 'That time people make sure'). The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the logical progression within paragraphs is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward sentence structures. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the frequent misuse of referencing make the flow feel disjointed. Improving the variety of transition signals would significantly enhance the readability of your work.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'bad situation' and 'make it good'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'analysised the mistake' and 'financely stable'. Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'phase' instead of 'face' and 'slove' instead of 'solve'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'amd', 'thier', 'dur') indicate a need for a wider range of vocabulary and more attention to accurate word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many individual say', 'every and each people have to'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'people should don't accept'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. These frequent errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and reducing errors in tense and agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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