Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Some individuals argue that it is best to adapt a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, other think that it is important to improve such situation and find new jobs. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion with some suitable examples.
On the first hand, some peoples belong to the poor family and not know about the modern technology very well, then they are worked on the construction shop and put the heavy weight on your body and in fact they are not agree with the job, but this job is essential for the family, Moreover, some peoples learn the skill from the teacher and firstly the leader pay the short money, but after gain the skill the person make lot of money from work and its helpful for future, For example, some person learn the driving skill and pay the money but after gain the skill they are buying the own car and start to earn the money.
On the other hand, sometimes individuals are worked on the same place, but few peoples try new jobs and give the interview and after they are clearing the interview they find the good job and improve a personal experience. Furthermore, when peoples work on the other place they meet with new person and get a lot of information from the person and gain the knowledge. For instance, mostly company worker applies jobs in the foreign countries because in other nation they get the good money and share the experience with foreign peoples.
In conclusion, some believe that bad situation is best for the person and other argue that it is better to find the new job and places. According to me, they are trying new jobs and improve the family and personal life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding accepting a bad situation are somewhat unclear, focusing on manual labor rather than the psychological or strategic reasons for staying in a difficult situation. The second body paragraph is more relevant but lacks depth in explaining why seeking new opportunities is superior. To improve, you should focus on expanding your arguments with more logical reasoning rather than just listing examples. The response meets the requirements of the prompt but remains at a basic level of development.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into four paragraphs, which is appropriate. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On the first hand' is an incorrect collocation, and the transition 'then they are worked' is grammatically awkward, which disrupts the flow of ideas. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the conclusion, the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the connection between sentences often feels forced. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the reader follow your arguments more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. You frequently use basic terms like 'good money', 'bad situation', and 'new jobs'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'adapt a bad situation' (should be 'accept') and 'make lot of money' (should be 'earn a significant income'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of range and the frequent errors in word formation prevent a higher score. You should focus on learning collocations and more precise academic vocabulary to better convey your points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'they are worked' instead of 'they work' and 'some peoples' instead of 'some people'. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'mostly company worker applies jobs'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and comma splices. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs are correctly conjugated and that plural/singular nouns are used consistently.
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