Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
It is often argued that people accept the situation like unsatisfactory job and less income. other some people believe that it is better to try and improve a situation. I believe that people should overcome the situation for improvmant their life.
on the one hand, accepting the many situation can be benificial for some cases. some people have limited opportunity due to their age, qualification as a results of they have no choices but they remain in a job live with limited income. in curcumstancs, they may not spend money unesoery things. also it can be avoid a frastresion. and and focus on the beast of what they have . moreover, its can not be changed may a negative impact on mental health.
On the other hand, many people believe that the overcome the situation. It can help to the people for continue the education, qulification. they may also find the best way to find the higher paying job. For better employmet , they are attending the various courses for improve the skill. If having a higher pay job they can easily fainansial support the family. they also explore the different different sources the job. taking a positive action not only improve living standards but also increases the confidence and personal satisfaction.
in conclusion , although accepting a difficult situation can provide a peas of mind in some cases. I belevies it is more beneficial to make efforts to overcome problems and create a better future. and also make a improve a confidance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention reasons for accepting a situation (limited opportunities, mental health) and reasons for improving it (education, higher pay), the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The ideas are presented in a list-like fashion rather than being fully extended. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that explains 'why' or 'how' rather than just stating the point. The response meets the task requirements, but the analysis remains at a surface level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand', and 'in conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'as a results of they have no choices' or 'in curcumstancs'. Additionally, there are issues with sentence-level cohesion, where ideas are sometimes linked abruptly or with incorrect punctuation. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'it', 'they') is clear will help move your score higher.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'improvmant', 'unesoery', 'frastresion', 'qulification', 'fainansial', 'peas of mind', 'belevies'). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'accepting the many situation' or 'fainansial support the family'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling. Avoid repeating words like 'situation' and 'job' by using synonyms or paraphrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it is better to try and improve a situation'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'make a improve a confidance'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence fragments and run-on sentences are also present, such as 'also it can be avoid a frastresion'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents a higher score. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses.
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