Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

so,As some people believe it is best to accept the bad situation ,for instance unsatisfactory job or shortage of money but if we see from the majority point of view for some people it may be right because they have to work no matter which job it is because they have to support they family and have they love ones which depend on them and they have to feed them so, for those people it may seem right but in my point of view it is that much right because , peace is one of the basic need that every human being need in their life when you accept bad situations and did not put efforts for best it may also stress that ruin the peace of life ,on the other hand if we talk about some people argued that it is better to try and improve such situations but not all people in this world is able or nor in a condition that they are able to wait and to improve that situation, many people who have freedom in their life and don't have responsibilities in their their life often take this move and the other people just accept and start doing things that have given to the , after all this discussion the conclusion and my point of view is that both of the things either accept bad things or wait and try to improve depend on the situation that happens so all the people have to make their decision wisely and carefully .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding why people accept bad situations (financial necessity) and why others try to improve them (freedom/lack of responsibility) are present but lack depth and specific examples. The essay is written as a single, long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. To improve, you should structure your essay into clear paragraphs—one for each viewpoint and one for your conclusion—and expand on your points with more detailed explanations or hypothetical scenarios.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks paragraphing, which is a significant issue for coherence. The entire response is one long, run-on sentence structure, making it difficult for the reader to identify where one idea ends and the next begins. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices (e.g., 'on the other hand', 'after all this discussion'), they are often used incorrectly or within sentences that lack proper punctuation. To achieve a higher score, you must use clear paragraph breaks and improve your use of linking words to connect ideas logically rather than relying on repetitive 'and' or 'so' connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'bad situation', 'do things', and 'make their decision' are used frequently. There is little evidence of less common or idiomatic vocabulary. To improve, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to the topic, such as 'financial hardship', 'professional dissatisfaction', 'proactive approach', or 'resilience'. Additionally, ensure you are using words in their correct form; for example, 'they family' should be 'their family' and 'they love ones' should be 'their loved ones'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The grammar is the weakest area of this response. The essay consists of very few actual sentences; instead, it is a series of clauses joined by commas and conjunctions, which is a major error in sentence structure. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, pronoun usage (e.g., 'they family' instead of 'their family'), and missing articles. Punctuation is almost entirely absent, which obscures the meaning of your arguments. To improve, focus on writing shorter, distinct sentences and ensure that you use correct punctuation, such as full stops, to separate your thoughts.

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