Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the recent times world makes lot of progress and peoples also give addvantage to get time and think. Peoples think if they said they are not satisfied with their job might they will fire from their job.
First of all our modern world became very fast. Peoples only wanted to earn money and live their better life.Some people think it is good for us to accepet that we earn less money than our abbilities.They think we don`t need tell a lie in front of peoples especially our sallary or unsatisfactory.People also know our condition and if we lying in front of them then they will embrase us in front of others peoples.
Secondly there are some people who belives we try our better to improve such conditions.They think if god gave us abilty to earn money so why we should try.They think if we get less salary from one place we should try on another place.In this way we earn much money and satisfied with our job.That's kind of job helps us to show our abbilities in front of entire world.
In my view point each opinion is good but i agree with first opinion. Because earning money is nothing. If we accept our satuation we will happy with our job and salary.If we satisfied with our job than this job also gives us benefits. Everythings wanted times so we give our time and respect our job.
in conclusion, both situation are good but every people have different kind of mind so they can think with it according to their mindset.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. For instance, the argument for accepting a bad situation is somewhat confusingly linked to 'telling a lie' about salary, which does not directly address the prompt's focus on the merits of acceptance versus improvement. The conclusion is also quite brief and lacks a summary of the main points. To improve, you should focus on providing clearer, more logical justifications for your position and ensure that your arguments directly relate to the prompt's core concepts of career and financial satisfaction.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use transition words like 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion', the internal flow within paragraphs is weak. The connections between sentences are sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the link between 'both situation' and the preceding arguments is not well-established. Improving the use of cohesive devices to create smoother transitions between sentences would significantly enhance the readability and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'good', 'money', and 'job'. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'addvantage', 'sallary', 'embrase', and 'belives', which occasionally make it difficult to follow your meaning. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and synonyms, and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy to ensure your message is communicated clearly to the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'world makes', 'peoples think'), incorrect word order, and missing articles. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, 'If we satisfied with our job than this job also gives us benefits' contains multiple errors in structure and word choice. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of conditional sentences before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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