Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individual believes that to accept a bad situation such as unwilling job or shortage of money other think we should work on it.
I will be partially agree with this situation.Individual have different believes or cultures.some people thinks karma is authentic and it's works.So getting a bad job always sad it's a karma.In human body works as we think in Hindi or Muslim culture mostly think that if we can't get anything it means it's not for me or they called it as a karma or fortune.But they don't think that if they work hard they get every thing which they desperately want. For example if I can said that I am loser in three times a day for a month .My brains start working according to it or they make me a loser.
On the other hand people believe that if you work hard you can get ride off every situation. If you get a job unwillingly you can make it interesting for yourself by getting involved you in it.Always giving your hundred percent to your job ,dream and career if you want to get succeed. It's depend on you whether you want luxurious life or a comfortable life.For example I don't want to DPT Doctor but for my father I can apply for it and now I am DPT graduate and I have so many opportunities for full filling my dreams. Both perspective work on your believes or your brain knowledge
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views, but the development is limited and the position is not consistently clear. The essay falls short of the 250-word minimum, which impacts the depth of the argument. While you mention cultural beliefs and the importance of hard work, the ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack sufficient supporting evidence. The conclusion is abrupt and does not fully synthesize the two perspectives. To improve, ensure each body paragraph has a clear topic sentence and fully developed examples that directly relate to the prompt's core question about accepting versus improving a situation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'For example' and 'If'. Transitions between ideas are often abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between personal anecdotes and the broader topic is weak. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would help create a smoother, more coherent structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and often repetitive, which limits the expression of complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word-choice errors, such as 'unwilling job' instead of 'unsatisfactory job' and 'get ride off' instead of 'get rid of'. You also use 'believes' as a noun instead of 'beliefs'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple vocabulary prevent a higher score. Expanding your range to include more academic collocations and precise terminology would significantly enhance the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Some individual believes', 'some people thinks') and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors in punctuation or word order, such as 'It's depend on you whether you want luxurious life or a comfortable life.' To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly before nouns.
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