Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In recent years, bad situation has become a widely debated issue among people of different backgrounds. Many people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money,while other are convinced that it is better to try and improve such situations. This essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own opinion.
On the one hand, those who support crises argue that some humans argue that it is best to accept a not good situation because it can not be done by the hands of human beings, it is in the hand of Allah almighty to bring about bad things, so every humans being should accept it and try to improve it. A clear example of this can be seen many peoples comes have bad times , they should accept a bad situation but do not society. when they have bad time if you think of doing it,it is not good to commit suicide it is not good work there fore it is accept a bad situation and it has try to good.
On the other hand, other believe that better to try argue that every peoples should that it is better to try and improve such situation. For instance bad times is unknown,so every humans being should try to improve it and improve it in any situation there fore peoples should it is better to try and improve such situation.
In conclusion, while both views have merit, I believe that my opinion is the both views in your own place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response addresses both views mentioned in the prompt, but the development of ideas is significantly hindered by unclear expression and a lack of logical progression. While you attempt to present two perspectives, the arguments are repetitive and lack specific, coherent examples. The conclusion is particularly weak, as it fails to clearly state your own opinion, merely stating that both views have merit without explaining why. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed argument with clear supporting evidence, and provide a definitive, well-reasoned personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure of these paragraphs is disjointed. There is a lack of logical progression, and the use of cohesive devices is often confusing or repetitive (e.g., 'there fore' and 'for instance' are used incorrectly). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. To improve, focus on using transition words more accurately and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to build a cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often repetitive, such as the constant reuse of 'bad situation' and 'improve'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'support crises' and 'not good work', which often impede the reader's understanding. You rely on basic, everyday language and struggle to express more complex ideas. To improve, try to expand your vocabulary by learning synonyms for common words and practicing how to use them in context, rather than repeating the same phrases throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning of your sentences. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'when they have bad time if you think of doing it,it is not good to commit suicide it is not good work'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence structures first, ensuring you have a clear subject and verb in every sentence, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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