Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is undeniable that many people are worried about their jobs and shortage of money . In this regard some people believe that it is best way to accept a bad situation such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money while other think that it is better to try and improve such situations .This essay will outline not only both perspectives but also my opinion regarding latter point of view due to many reason which will outline in forthcoming fragment with logical conclusion .
To commence with there are several point latter point of view . Firstly it helps to improve problem solving skills to explain it that people accept their conditions then people do not worrying by bad condition the will find the best path to solve the problem if they worry about bad situation they become panic . Secondly it also provide a better future to justify it that if person passed the bad time then they get a better future
In conclusion there are few point in favour of former point such as bad condition yet according to me the importance if latter point can never be neglected at any c
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks to discuss both views, the essay only provides a very brief and underdeveloped argument for one side. The conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence, and the discussion of the 'former' view is almost entirely absent. Consequently, the response is underdeveloped and fails to address all parts of the task effectively. To improve, you must ensure each viewpoint is supported by clear examples and explanations, and you must complete the essay within the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Firstly', and 'Secondly', but the overall progression is hindered by the lack of content and the abrupt ending. Paragraphing is present, but the logical flow between ideas is weak due to the brevity of the arguments. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is mechanical. To improve, focus on developing each paragraph with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting evidence and a concluding thought, ensuring that the essay structure remains intact until the very end.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'bad situation', 'better future', and 'shortage of money' are used repeatedly, indicating a lack of range. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'forthcoming fragment' and 'latter point of view', which sound unnatural in this context. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider variety of synonyms and more precise academic vocabulary. Focus on learning collocations related to problem-solving and professional development to express your ideas more naturally and accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other think'), article usage (e.g., 'best way'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'to explain it that people accept their conditions then people do not worrying'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around punctuation marks. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions.
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