Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is undeniable that different people have different opinion in their life. In this regard some individuals believes that it is best deal to accept bad situation of our life such as unsatisfactory job or lack of money. This essay will outline the both views on this statement with relevant examples and also includes the my viewpoint with logical conclusion.
To commence with hard circumstances can occur due to poor status in society and illiteracy not only does it lead to scarcity of finances but it also lets some acquire undesirable
jobs for some cents. Nobody expects terrible states of affairs, however it never goes without teaching a lesson to human being. For example poverty educates how to control high demands and utilize every coin very wisely.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 127 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the introduction mentions both views, the body paragraph only touches upon the first perspective (accepting bad situations) and fails to discuss the second view (improving situations) or provide a clear, developed personal opinion. The ideas presented are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth required for an academic essay. To improve, you must ensure you address all parts of the prompt equally and provide sufficient supporting evidence and examples to meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into an introduction and one body paragraph, but the lack of a conclusion and the incomplete nature of the argument hinder the overall progression. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence with' and 'For example', but the connection between ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. Paragraphing is present, but the structure is insufficient for a full essay. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you use a wider range of linking words to connect your arguments logically throughout the entire piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. Phrases like 'bad situation' and 'terrible states of affairs' are somewhat repetitive and simplistic. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'best deal to accept' instead of 'best to accept'. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to the topic, such as 'socio-economic challenges' or 'proactive measures', rather than relying on common, everyday language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('some individuals believes') and awkward phrasing ('the both views'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often repetitive. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and varying your sentence structure by using more complex forms, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, while ensuring that your grammar remains accurate.
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