Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many individuals think that it is best to accept a bad financial situation, such as an low paid job and shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve their situations. This essay will both views before presenting my own opinion.
On the one hand, nowadays numerous people suffer from lack of money and they should take steps for improve their financial conditions. This is because they are working low paying jobs they cannot provides good life to their families and they can start new business, it is very difficult for middle class person to fulfilled family needs. As a result, middle class family cannot afford private schools for study and they cannot buy groceries and clothes, but they should improve practical skills and develop new ideas for startup. For instance, Africa people do not have food and resources their government is currpat they do not provide facilites to public. consequently, Africa poorest place in the world there do not have good opportunities, but their people have practical skills.
On the other hand, many people do not have sufficient money for startup, therefore they often stop their plans because they think they do not have investment for startup. For instance, India individuals are have great ideas and they want to show their telent to the world, but their family do not support him.
To conclude, people who working to low paid job, they do not fulfil their requirement, they should new busniness to using their brain. However, they do not have funds for invest to their work and ideas.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views, but the development of ideas is inconsistent and often lacks clarity. While you mention the need to improve financial situations, the arguments are fragmented and rely on generalizations, such as the references to Africa and India, which are not effectively linked to the prompt's core theme of 'accepting vs. improving' a situation. The conclusion does not clearly state your own opinion, which is a requirement of the task. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your personal stance is explicitly stated in the introduction and reinforced in the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'Consequently' are used, they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. To improve, focus on using transition words that accurately reflect the relationship between your ideas and ensure that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'currpat' (corrupt), 'facilites' (facilities), and 'telent' (talent). These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms related to socio-economic issues and ensure you are using words in their correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'Other argue', 'India individuals are have'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'people who working to low paid job'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb. Regular practice with proofreading for common errors will also be beneficial.
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