Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals states that, it is better to accept a situation where they have to suffer from shortage of money and lack of satisfactory jobs . Both the views along with my perception will br discussed in upcoming paragraphs.

If we talk about to accept difficult situation, in many terms it is due to lack of jobs, In other words, we can see in today world almost every individual is working hard to achieve his desirable work, but sometimes it is not like that because as we all know, Competetion is increasing day by day, So you are not the only one who is working day and night for this job many individuals along with you are also there , because of this job vacancies are becoming slower and they do not have enough seats and placements for every student. Secondly ,The another reason is, not having the criteria and requirements for that particular job. For example, if we work as a bank manager our financial conditions must be strong and effective and we also have to meet the age criteria. So sometimes many people are unable to get their desirable job which may put a bad impact on their health as well of family.

Conversely, the another issue is lack of money, as we all know we are living in a society where people and poor and as far as rich too. But sometimes, if we are going to purchase a car or built a house we need a huge amount of money to do so . but sometimes we ask money to our relative or a family member but the deny to give so we get to know that they are our members only on our faced but actually they are double-faced, Hence, in this situation we have to agree that in this world except our parents no one is going to give us a single penny but they will give u every single amount they have so n this pandemic we get to know that ' Money is Everything '.

In conclusion, it is clear that if we work hard we are able to achieve our desirable jobs and because of this this we will able to earn a good amount of money. So we have not to face money shortage in our whole life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt but fails to provide a balanced discussion. While the first body paragraph touches on the 'accepting' view, the second paragraph shifts focus to financial struggles and personal anecdotes about family members rather than discussing the 'improving' view requested by the prompt. The conclusion does not summarize the two views but instead offers a personal opinion that is not well-integrated with the preceding arguments. The position is not clearly maintained throughout, and the development of ideas is inconsistent, often drifting into irrelevant personal commentary rather than analytical discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or misused (e.g., 'Conversely, the another issue is...'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear topic sentence followed by supporting evidence, leading to a disjointed flow of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'double-faced' and 'on our faced'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to express complex ideas with precision. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in collocation prevent the response from reaching a higher band. More sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic of employment and financial management is needed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('Some individuals states'), punctuation issues, and run-on sentences. The range of structures is limited, with a heavy reliance on simple sentences. Complex structures are attempted but often contain errors that impede clarity, such as the sentence starting with 'If we talk about to accept...'. These errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, though the overall message remains understandable.

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