Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Several individuals suppose that it is best to agree a bad condition, for example, dissatisfied job or lack of money. opposition think that it is good to try and improve these scenario.
Now a days there is lack of job and shortage of money in our world.
This essay will discuss the both good and bad situation for facing the things.
few of the people always believe that you should have to accept all the bad situations and go on as these all things are already written in your life. In our country teenagers are looking for some job to meet there expenses because there parents ask them to earn their own money to meet their expenses like hostel dues etc. due to this teenagers look for some jobs to earn some money. but these young child do not pay attention to their parents and accept these bad situation and decide to move on with this bad destiny.
Other individuals thinks that you should have to try the things again and again till you succeed because if you try again and again you will improve the tough situation and you will succeed. there is a quote of a writer that "try, try again till you succeed" it means that if you are trying again and again to your bad or tough situation you will be succeeded for sure.
in my own opinion i would like to say that it is much better thing to try again and again to improve your work. because trying again and again on your works makes you perfect.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The discussion regarding teenagers and hostel dues is somewhat tangential and does not fully explain why one might choose to accept a bad situation as a philosophical or life strategy. The arguments are repetitive, particularly the reliance on the 'try again' quote, which lacks depth. To improve, you should provide more substantial reasoning for why someone might choose acceptance—perhaps discussing the value of patience or the lack of alternatives—rather than focusing on specific, narrow examples like teenagers and hostel fees.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The introduction is disjointed, and the transition between the two viewpoints is abrupt. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'for example', 'but', 'because'), they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'facing the things'. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'agree a bad condition' instead of 'accept a difficult situation' and 'dissatisfied job' instead of 'unsatisfactory job'. The repetition of phrases like 'try again and again' and 'meet their expenses' indicates a restricted range. To achieve a higher band, you need to move beyond basic vocabulary and attempt to use more precise collocations and academic terminology relevant to the topic of personal development and life challenges.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Other individuals thinks'), article usage (e.g., 'there is lack of job'), and pronoun errors (e.g., 'there parents' instead of 'their parents'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that pronouns are used correctly. Proofreading for common errors like 'there/their' will also significantly improve your score.
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