Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that it is best to accept the bad situation such as an unsatisfactory jobs or the financial problems they face but others argue that it is better to find solutions of the problem they face and try to improve the circumstances.

On the one hand, some people accept the circumstances of the jobs they are doing because they have responcibities of family and they think it's better to continue it even though they are not happy about it. They also feel the financial pressure of the life they lead and sometimes they cant save money because of family. They think they should accept the fact that they can't balance between work life and it's risky to try to start from the beggning.

On the other hand, some people believe that no matter how bad the situation is they will try their best to improve it wheither it's about jobs or money. They think accepting a situation will not slove anything.

In my opinion i think no matter how bad the situation is we should always try to improve it and overcome our fear.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both views and provide a personal opinion, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The essay is too brief to fully explore the complexities of the prompt, resulting in a superficial treatment of the topic. To improve, you must expand your points by providing concrete examples, consequences, or deeper analysis for each perspective to ensure the response is well-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to signal shifts in perspective. However, the progression of ideas is limited by the brevity of the text. The transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical, and the overall flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect your arguments more fluidly. Paragraphing is present, but the content within those paragraphs is too sparse to demonstrate high-level cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on common, repetitive phrasing such as 'bad situation' and 'improve it'. There are also some spelling errors, such as 'responcibities' (responsibilities), 'beggning' (beginning), 'wheither' (whether), and 'slove' (solve). To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more sophisticated vocabulary and collocations related to the topic of career and financial management, while ensuring accurate spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. Examples include 'unsatisfactory jobs' (should be singular 'an unsatisfactory job'), 'the financial pressure of the life' (unnecessary article), and 'can't balance between work life' (missing object). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the use of commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents a higher score.

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