Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individuals think that is good to take a bad situation. For instance, they are unsatisfied for the job or worried about shortage of money. In this essay some argue that is good or try and improve these situations. we should discuss both views and our opinion.
Firstly, some individuals think about our job because they should disagree own job. They increase mental problems, mind stress or physical problems to own body. the major thing is they do not glad our currently job because they did not like the job, some individuals have different goals in our life, but they do not archive this some of they do not able to continue there studies. every child has different mind set. For instance, my cousin do not had sharp mind but he will try again and again but he failed. some problems have merit base issue now days, so he did not archive our goal such as doctor but and he should able to get normal admin job and he did not satisfied own job.
For my perspective, some the merit base problems they do not compete their own best and some of shortage of money no job no money. They should try and try until they succeed because try again and again they gain our knowledge and they try some hard work. They improve our skills and work on it. For instance, According to recently survey, some people they do not work our skills and they clear own exam for normal passing marks. They do not understand about our job.
In conclusion, Some individuals do not understand our job, they do not work our skills, some of shortage of money in our life. They improve our skill and to search a better job.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development is significantly hindered by unclear expression and a lack of logical depth. The arguments regarding job dissatisfaction and merit-based issues are difficult to follow, and the examples provided (such as the cousin's experience) are not clearly linked to the prompt's core theme of accepting versus improving a situation. The position is stated but lacks the necessary clarity and academic tone required for a higher band. The ideas are often repetitive and under-developed, making it challenging for the reader to grasp the intended argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step, but the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'For my perspective' is non-standard, and the links between sentences are frequently broken by grammatical errors. Referencing is often unclear, particularly with the use of pronouns like 'they' and 'our', which makes it difficult to identify the subjects being discussed. The overall flow is frequently interrupted, requiring the reader to re-read sections to understand the intended meaning.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There is a frequent misuse of words, such as 'archive' instead of 'achieve', and 'merit base issue' which is not used in a standard way. The student struggles with basic collocations, such as 'do not glad our currently job' and 'increase mental problems'. While the student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary, the lack of precision and the frequent errors in word choice mean that the range is only minimally adequate for the task. The vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'my cousin do not had'), incorrect verb tenses, and sentence fragments. The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences that are often constructed incorrectly. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the misuse of pronouns (e.g., 'our' instead of 'their') creates confusion throughout the text. These persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the essay from reaching a higher band, as the meaning is frequently obscured.
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