Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

THERE ARE TWO CONTRASTING VIEW POINT WHEREAS SECTION OF SOCIETY BELIEVES THAT IS THE BEST THING TO ADOPT THE BAD TIME SUCH AS UNSTATISFACTION JOB OR LACK OF MONEY, WHILE OTHER OPIEN THAT IT IS IMPORTANT TO IMPROVE THE SUCH STITIONS. IN FORTHCOMING PARAGHRAPHS I WILL EXPLAIN THE BOTH VIE POINTSALONG WITH MY OPINION.

ONE THE ONE HAND, I BLEIEVE THAT AND LARGER SECTION OF SOCIETY BELIEVE THAT ACCEPT THE BAD SITUTION, THE FIRST ONE IS ,PEOPLE HAVE SUPPORTIVE FAIMLY. TO BE MORE PRECISIE, SOME PEOPLE ARE NOT SATISFIED WITH THEIR JOB BECAUSE THEY WANT TO DO JOB ON HIGHER POST BUT, THEY ARE NOT ENOUGH QUALIFICATION TO DO THAT JOB. SOME PEOPLE FACE SOME FINANCIAL SHORTAGE BUT THEY HAVE THEIR FAIMLY SUPPORT SO, THAT WHY THE ACCEPT THESE BAD SITUTIONS.FOR EXAMPLE , A PERSON WANTS TO WORK IN LARGER ORGANIZATION BUT, HE NOT WELL EDUCATED BECAUSE, HIS FAIMLY NOT FINANCIAL WELL. HENCE,IF THE WORKERS GAIN THEIR FAIMILY TRUST OR SUPPORT THEY DO THEIR WORK IN ANY CONDITIONS.

ON THE OTHER HAND, SOME PEOPLE ARGU THAT IT IS BETTER TO TRY AND SOLVE SUCH SITUTIONS FIRST OF ALL, FOR SECURE FUTURE. IF THE PEOPLE IMPROVE THEIR BAD SITUTIONS DURING THAT TIME THEY HAVE CHANCE TO WILL SECURE THEIR FUTURE ALSO.EXPLANING MORE, THE PERSON DOING JOB WITHOUT SATISFACTION HE WILL NEVER BE SUCCESS IN HIS LIFE BECAUSE HE WAS NOT CONCENTRATE HIS WORK DUE TO THIS, HE IS NOT PROVIDE PROFIT TO THE ORGANIZTION AND NOT TAKE ANY REVENUE AND BOUNS FROM HIS COMPANY.THEREFORE IF THE INDIVIDUALS TRY TO DO BETTER WORK IN THE FIRMS AT PRESENT ,THEY WILL GOT HIGHER SALARIES AND SECURE THEIR FUTURE AS WELL.

IN CONCLUSION, SOME PEOPLE AND I BELEIVE THAT IT IS BEST TO ACCEPT BAD SITITIONS BECAUSE THEY HAVE THEIR FAIMLY SUPPORT IN THE SHORTAGE OF MONEY WHEREAS OTHER ARGU THAT TRY TO IMPROVE FOR THER SECURE AND SAFE FUTURE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding why people accept bad situations are somewhat confusing, particularly the link between family support and job dissatisfaction. The explanation of the second view is more logical but remains repetitive. To reach a higher band, you need to provide more specific, well-reasoned examples and ensure your position is clearly articulated throughout the essay rather than just in the conclusion. The current arguments are somewhat superficial and lack the depth required for a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'THE FIRST ONE IS ,PEOPLE HAVE SUPPORTIVE FAIMLY'. There are also issues with referencing; for example, the transition between ideas within paragraphs is often abrupt. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs and conclusion, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of transition signals would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'FAIMLY', 'OPIEN', 'SITUTIONS', and 'PHAGHRAPHS'. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there are several instances of incorrect word choice or collocation, such as 'ADOPT THE BAD TIME' instead of 'accept difficult circumstances' and 'NOT ENOUGH QUALIFICATION' instead of 'lacking the necessary qualifications'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling mistakes hinder the overall quality of the response. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('his family not financial well'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, which can occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many misplaced commas and a lack of proper capitalization. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and article usage before attempting more complex structures.

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