Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I believe that difficult situations are unavoidable in life, but people should remain positive and continue moving in the right direction.

i would strongly believe that worst moments will come and across some times but we should follow our direction in the right way with our positive thoughts while doing unsatisfied work. For an instance a person doing an unsatisfied work for their family they need to do for them to become better life. Whereas if that person get any trouble in the working environment he needs to adjust and do their work it would be crucial for them. Since it was an uncomfortable surface but it is not a regular work place .Firstly they need some hope in their life all the worst moment will go in one day. These kind of positive attitude will make them strong in the bad situation. Therefore they can manage anything in the bad moment ,additionally they can face the issue in the spot without any hesitations.

On the other hand challenging situation will make them better person comparatively by past bad case presented. For an example while a TCS IT employee does need to complete a task with no one assisted in the team ,although his manager will make his very critical situation if he does not complete his work properly. However if it not complete within boss time deadline it doesn't matter he will fired in the TCS company or getting lost him. Its all a vital performing under the pressure he will make mistakes and trouble with his work ,eventhough he does not like his job very much his duty to complete boss task allocated he need to finish with respectively.

In the conclusion i strongly agree to the point is work , or shortage level of economy we face that momentum .Generally we need to face and accept the situation within positive mindset and move on to the next path in our life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views, but the development of ideas is inconsistent and often unclear. While you mention the importance of maintaining a positive attitude and the necessity of facing challenges, the arguments are repetitive and lack specific, logical support. The example regarding the TCS employee is somewhat confusing and does not clearly illustrate the broader point about improving a bad situation versus accepting it. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct argument with clear, logical progression. Your position is stated in the introduction and conclusion, but the supporting arguments need more depth and clarity to fully meet the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow between and within them is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', and 'In the conclusion', their usage is often mechanical or incorrectly placed. Referencing is sometimes ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. To improve, focus on using transition words that accurately reflect the relationship between your ideas and ensure that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'bad situation', 'unsatisfied work', and 'good'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'uncomfortable surface' (likely meaning environment) and 'shortage level of economy'. Some phrases are difficult to interpret, which hinders the overall clarity of your argument. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including more precise academic collocations and synonyms, and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the essay, including issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'Its all a vital performing under the pressure he will make mistakes'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalisation. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate, which can cause difficulty for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors will significantly improve the readability and accuracy of your writing.

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