Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people would argue that it is good to accept the detrimental moment such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Another group of people believe that it is better to try and enhance such moments. I strongly illustrates both sides of opinion.

Whenever we face challenging situation it would be a life changing moments. It would taught more crucial lessons while attempting a harmful situation. As a result a fresher joining in the TCS Information technology corporate at the began stage it could be difficult to sustain without knowing each other. However days cross we did a massive mistake in our work we just be calm and handle the worst situation at the moment that is the most vital thing for the people who can manage in the hardest scenarios. In addition financial it would affect entire family member but we should do our profession without any hesitation whereas income will generate simulteneously. In contrast lower economy comes under the detrimental situation we just manage that too also with patient and money saving control.

On the other hand all our life was living to face each and everything its a normal way ,but if we struggling during the period of unhappy situation it could be a better enhance to our character since it may obtain how can face this situation in the future. Therefore it would taught us more experienced eventhough numerous time we facing the struggles. For an example if a 10 year old kid got failed in the mathematic subject during his academic standard conversely he always hit failure in the bad form of study. However he consist practice make his get centum in the final exam by identifying his mistake and getting better from the harmful form of his academic during in his early stage.

In the conclusion working professional issues or lower level economy situation we are face in our respective life always remember to manage with patient mindset and move to the next chapter in our life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides an opinion, though the development is inconsistent. The introduction is somewhat confusing, as the phrase 'I strongly illustrates' is grammatically incorrect and unclear in its intent. While you attempt to discuss both accepting a situation and improving it, the arguments are often obscured by unclear phrasing and a lack of logical progression. For instance, the example of the 'TCS Information technology corporate' is anecdotal and does not clearly support the broader argument about accepting versus improving a situation. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your examples directly relate to the prompt's core concepts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal flow is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and unclear referencing. Phrases like 'However days cross' and 'In contrast lower economy comes under the detrimental situation' are difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, which hinders the logical progression of your ideas. The conclusion is also quite abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. Improving your use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. You frequently use words that do not fit the context, such as 'detrimental moment' instead of 'difficult situation' or 'unhappy situation'. There are also issues with word forms, such as 'financial' used as a noun and 'simulteneously' (spelling error). While you attempt to use more complex vocabulary, the lack of precision often leads to confusion. To reach a higher band, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that you use words in their correct grammatical form and appropriate context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the essay, which often impedes communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('it would taught'), tense confusion ('if we struggling'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. The structure of your sentences is often simplistic or convoluted, making it hard for the reader to grasp your meaning. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures, particularly subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses, before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for basic errors like 'it's' versus 'its' and pluralization would also be beneficial.

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