Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is a topic of debate whether people should compromise with undesireable job and less money or they should make efforts to create better situations at work and to increase their salary.

To begin with, If citizens have are not getting job where they are satisfied with work enviornment and remuneration, it demotivate them. They sometimes get inferiority complex at work which affect their mental health and capacil reduce their output. Secondly, it affects their family life. for example, if a person is not getting appreciation at work, he feels irritated at work and home too. sometimes vomit out the his feelings at family members. Thirdly, In today's era it is hard to make both ends meet with less money. He will not be able to give better education opportunities to their kids. It will affect the progress of next generation.

On the other hand, If they will try to change situation at work it can affect the performance of employers, Because sometimes higher authorities does not like their rules and regulations to be changed. It can irritate the owner of the company and can further escalate the situation, furthermore, if an employee will focus on changing work enviornment and will do strikes etc. to get more salary it will affect the production of the company, which will further affect the economy of the nation.

To recapitulate, It is a dautating task to work at less salary and without any appreciation at workplace. But people should take careful steps to handle the situation so that they can make best work enviornment without hurting feelings of employers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While the arguments regarding the negative impact of unsatisfactory work on mental health and family life are relevant, the counter-argument regarding the risks of trying to change a workplace is slightly underdeveloped and relies on generalizations. The position is consistent, but the depth of analysis could be improved by providing more nuanced examples or a more sophisticated exploration of the trade-offs involved in both approaches. The essay meets the requirements of the prompt but remains at a fairly basic level of argumentation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a central topic. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Secondly', 'On the other hand', and 'To recapitulate' are used to guide the reader. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, such as the transition between the discussion of family life and the financial aspect. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly with the use of pronouns like 'He' which lacks a clear antecedent in some contexts. Paragraphing is logical, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be more fluid.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'vomit out the his feelings' and 'dautating task'. The student relies on common, everyday language and struggles with more sophisticated collocations. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in word formation and usage limit the score. To improve, the student should focus on learning more precise academic vocabulary and common collocations related to employment and workplace dynamics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('higher authorities does not like'), missing articles ('at work', 'at workplace'), and awkward sentence construction ('If citizens have are not getting job'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences starting with lowercase letters after a period or containing unnecessary commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. A greater focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy is needed.

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