Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Many people thought it is optimistic to face a bad condition, such as an unsatisfactory job or bad situation of money but opponents says that it is better to try and change such conditions. I want to talk one by one on these situations and also give my opinion.
Initialy, lot of people believe that its face poor situation is better to do work under people because they feel hazitation to work under anyone. Apart from this people can't do work for the fear of social stigma mostly people face many problems for this fear. Recently, my friend dispute a very big loss in their business and after that there are very bad situation on it because all the expensces of their family on it. I told him to started a job of security guard but he properly say not because a fear of social stigma.
On the other hand opponents says that it is optimistic to try and improve such situation because they can't face bad situation in presence of many opportunities of jobs. They think to do some job for change situation and also got some experience and its jobs make them strong for next step. Apart from this they met with many type of people and learnt many solution of many problems. For example 2 year ago I, started my online business of knifes and I, use paypal app for payment method unfortunately my account official ban and I face many problems but as soon as possible I start work as a waiter in hotel for change my situation its work help me to stand again and after some time again I started my work.
In my opinion, its better to improve such situation because I have tried it on my self its very good way to stand our position again as compared to face many problems.
To conclude, second point of view is better as compared to first and also there are a lot of advantages of try to improve
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation for why people accept bad situations is slightly confusing, as the text mentions 'fear of social stigma' and 'hesitation to work under anyone' without fully clarifying how these relate to accepting a bad situation. The personal examples provided are relevant but could be more effectively linked to the broader argument. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that your arguments are fully extended and that the logical connection between your examples and the prompt is explicit.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Initialy' and 'Apart from this' are used repetitively. Some transitions are missing or awkward, such as the abrupt start to the conclusion. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the pronoun 'it' is used ambiguously. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'bad situation of money', 'dispute a very big loss', and 'properly say not'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly opaque. To improve, focus on learning collocations (e.g., 'financial difficulties' instead of 'bad situation of money') and using more precise terminology to express your ideas. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main points, but it remains basic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('opponents says'), incorrect verb tenses ('my friend dispute'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar structures prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage will help improve your accuracy.
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