Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the recent times. there are various options to allow individuals to develop and achieve their desires. There is an ongoing debate is there whether it is better to accept the worst situations like a unpleasant job or do not have sufficient money. This essay will examine both the views and express my view point.
To begin with, Lack of personal education and limited experience are the main reasons of not getting a job, In addition, Special circumstances force an individuals to accept any occupation and a low salary job. For example, students having scholarships are obliged to work regardless of having a salary to pay their tuition fees. Therefore, lacking services such as education and volunteering in some villages make it difficult for individual to develop their situation.
On the other hand, there are many technological advancements are done in may fields which make everything to achieve easily. It is possible to say that people can take various educational courses that can help them to land a perfect job and it also increase the chances of getting a promotion. As a result, there are several possible ways to improve a bad situation.
In conclusion, there is no easy answers to this question. I believe that, there are always have better opportunities for improvement and for that, it is better to give a chance to try and learn new things and taking a risk. As more failure definitely lead to success.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of the discussion. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the explanation of why people accept bad situations is quite brief and lacks specific, well-supported examples. The conclusion is also quite short. To improve, you should expand on your arguments with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for a more comprehensive exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'On the other hand' to signal transitions. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the logical progression is slightly disjointed, such as the transition between the lack of education and the example of students with scholarships. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus will enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'tuition fees', 'technological advancements', and 'promotion'. However, there are some awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'In the recent times' (should be 'In recent times') and 'make everything to achieve easily' (should be 'make everything easier to achieve'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and a wider range of academic vocabulary, while ensuring that your word choices are natural and accurate in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'There is an ongoing debate is there whether' (redundant 'is there'), 'do not have sufficient money' (should be 'not having'), and 'there are many technological advancements are done' (incorrect passive construction). While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they often contain errors. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound. Proofreading for basic errors like these will significantly improve your score.
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