Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today's society, some people argues that to live in bad condition is good, like as an unsatisfactory employment or lack of money, while other says that it is a very good way to try and developed your such matters. In this essay, I will discuss the both sides of the statement and also give my opinion.
On one hand, those who thinks to accept bad jobs with full strength and poor money is not good. This is because, when a man does their work honestly and full of their responsibilities, but after one month when their salary times comes, they receive very little money. But this salary will be very less for their family. And they pass their month with full of efforts to save money. Therefore, it is not good to stay on poor situations with unsatisfactory of job and shortage of money.
On the other hand, those people who argues that it is better to try and developed your situations are good. Because, sometimes people are their in difficulties and they don't receive a good job and face lack of money. But this time, they realize that this is the best time to improve our habits and learn the lesson with bad times. Moreover, they also give this lesson to their children to get a good success in their lifes.
In my opinion, both sides have their results but i agree with those who believes that to accept bad situations for try or improves theirself.
In conclusion, those people who lives with bad jobs and face difficulties of their financial are mad. But those who learn by this are are hardworking.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. The arguments regarding why one should or should not accept a bad situation are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the explanation of why people should improve their situation is vague, relying on general statements like 'learn the lesson with bad times' rather than providing concrete examples or logical reasoning. The position is stated but remains somewhat underdeveloped throughout the essay, leading to a lack of clarity in the overall argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', 'In conclusion'), they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a mechanical way. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the two sentences is weak. The overall flow is hindered by the lack of logical links between the sentences within paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'salary times comes', 'developed your such matters', and 'unsatisfactory of job'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use more precise or academic language. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the persistent errors in word formation and usage prevent the response from reaching a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that affect the readability of the text. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some people argues', 'those who thinks'), article usage, and sentence structure. Complex sentence attempts are often faulty, leading to confusion, such as 'those who believes that to accept bad situations for try or improves theirself'. While simple sentences are used, the frequent errors in basic grammar and punctuation make the writing difficult to follow at times.
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