Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the essay we discussed about the opinion of some that are argue some people think that it is excellent to accept the bad situation but such unsatisfactory job because the income of the job shortage and difficult to survive on this money. I agree to accept the bad situation of shortage of money but try to improve this situation.
In the situation some people right on this situation that it is difficult to survive on the shortage of the income. During the month work hard every time and try to give best in the job but he faced many problems in the whole life. when the income of the job is less and depend on this income so he unsatisfied about the job and the only way to accept the bad situation. In the job they do not try to improve the job and earn more money for the life because on the job they can difficult to spend the time.
Then most of the other people think try to better to improve the such situation and earn better income from the job try to work hard and gain better income from the job in the situation. And improve the situation of job and enjoy better life.
In the conclusion that which the people accept the bad situation they do not try to change our life they accept this life of the shortage of money and satisfied on the job but some people want to change the life they want to work hard and earn better income make our life easy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views, but the development of ideas is very limited and often repetitive. The arguments lack depth, and the position is somewhat confusingly stated in the introduction. For example, the essay mentions 'shortage of money' repeatedly without providing specific reasons or examples to support why one might accept or improve such a situation. The ideas are under-developed, and the conclusion does not clearly synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, you should focus on providing concrete examples and logical explanations for each viewpoint rather than repeating the same points in different ways.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step, but the internal flow of ideas is weak. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'In the situation' or 'In the job'. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences often lack logical links. Referencing is also unclear; for instance, the use of 'he' in the second paragraph is ambiguous as it does not clearly refer back to a specific subject. You need to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'job', 'money', 'situation', and 'bad'. There is little attempt to use less common lexical items or collocations appropriate for an academic essay. Some word choices are inaccurate, such as 'the income of the job shortage', which makes the meaning unclear. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'financial constraints', 'career advancement', or 'professional development', and avoid repeating the same basic nouns and adjectives throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'some people that are argue'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'satisfied on the job'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty or incomplete. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which affects the readability of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using a wider variety of complex structures with greater accuracy.
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