Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

People don't make struggle to make their life better. Even god don't change condiotions if they are not trying to changing themselves.

In my opinion everyone should try to be at some better places. No ione should be comfortable witrh unsatisfacatory job and having a small amount. Bad situation happen to evweryone but we should've to overcome these. The argument is strongest if water remain constant it start smelling badly. Movement is life. Nothing should be amount of yourself respect. these situations should be confronted and solved at the right time. Our Body is designed by the God in flexible way. Hard work is in Our bones. No onme should be sattle for unsatisfactory job or shortage of money just because it become their comfort place. Growth always ruined your confort.

Other people support the firsyt opinion. They belive that what is written in their destiny should happen. Thinking pattern of the people make them lazy and they accept bad situations and thet will say we can't change it. Insidely they don't want leave their comfort zone. They don't want a challening environment where they need to put more struggle to get recognized. They just blame fate and say " we should accept the situation may be its all written for us". On oyher side they are lacking in skills which they are not work to improve.

In my own scenerio i had an unsatisfactory job for three months which help me to find my lacking areas. I work on my self to improve my positioning and entered in a renowned organization.

In conclusion, While acceptance brings peace, actively improve bad situations leads to growth, better opportunities and long term personal satisfaction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention that some people believe in destiny, the explanation is repetitive and lacks depth. The argument for improving situations is supported by a personal anecdote, which is relevant, but the overall structure of the argument is hindered by a lack of logical progression. The ideas are present, but they are not fully extended or supported with sophisticated reasoning, which limits the score to a Band 5.0. To improve, focus on providing more detailed explanations and examples for each perspective.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'On oyher side', 'In my own scenerio'). The logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the first paragraph where the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas is not always smooth. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they are not always used effectively to connect ideas logically. Improving the variety and accuracy of transition signals will help improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'make struggle', 'sattle for', and 'lacking in skills which they are not work to improve'. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. While you attempt to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'comfort zone' and 'renowned organization', the overall range is narrow. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on learning more precise collocations and synonyms to avoid repeating basic words. Additionally, ensure that you are using words in their correct grammatical form to improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Even god don't change', 'situation happen'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors that impede the flow of the text. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several typos and capitalization errors throughout the response. The range of structures is limited, and the frequent errors in basic grammar significantly affect the readability of the essay. Focusing on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors will be essential for improvement.

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