Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the past, people were accepted as bad situation they had. people were lived their lives in a simple and decent manner. As the time passes, technology has change the world and summarize it in a global village. As the world make progress, competitions become more and more challenging.
In this time, only those people achieve success whose has skills. That is why, the unemployment has become the worldwide issue. Every country is facing unemployment because today computer hold the world in a hand. There is no need of people for making reports and assignments because all of these things is possible through computer. However, companies demands those people whose has perfect skills and work experiences. That's why, people face unemployment nowadays. But it is a good thing to accept a bad situation and move on. some people face very bad situation including unsatisfactory job or run short of money. From my perspective, it is good if you accept the bad situation and then move on. Next, you will try your best. Don't waste your time in one thing. You have to try your best and best in the next. Everything is happens and happens nothing is in your hand just try your best and accepting the things that is not good for you.
In conclusion, in the past people were live their lives in a very simple and decent manner and they were accepting the bad situation as they had. However, technology makes the unemployment in the world. It is good if you accept the bad situation and move on. This is the way from which you can come over your problem.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views, but the development is limited and repetitive. While you state your position clearly, the arguments provided are underdeveloped. For instance, the discussion on technology and unemployment is somewhat tangential to the core prompt about accepting versus improving a bad situation. The ideas lack depth and logical progression, often relying on generalizations rather than specific examples or nuanced reasoning. To improve, ensure that each paragraph directly supports your position with clear, distinct arguments rather than repeating the same sentiment about 'moving on' multiple times. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not synthesize the arguments effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'However' and 'In conclusion', they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that makes the text feel mechanical. The progression of ideas is not always clear, as the transition between the impact of technology and the advice to 'accept a bad situation' is abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence builds upon the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. You frequently use simple words like 'bad', 'good', and 'things', which lack the precision required for an academic essay. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'summarize it in a global village' and 'computer hold the world in a hand'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including more precise nouns, verbs, and adjectives, and focus on using them in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('companies demands', 'all of these things is possible'), tense usage ('people were lived'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or contain awkward syntax, which makes the writing difficult to read at times. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will also help to improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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