Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

certain number of people argue that it is better to accept a negative situations such as poor job satisfaction or low income rather than complaining since they can afford basic amnities. while other believe that it is opportunity to improve more. in my view, it is better to develop other skills than working in an unwelcoming environment.

On one hand, some people are scared to leave their comfort zone to a new place so them tend to manage with a toxic environment since them can afford basic things like housing and feeding. And there is also some jobs that comes with accommodations with little pay to encourage the employee to accept the offers then their silence is brought. For instant, a worker who lives in a company apartment with no saving is giving extra workloads outside normal duties cannot complain because he/her have no whereless to go thereby living their mercy.

on the other hand, few individuals prefer to improve their skills to work in a more better organization. while others can even pick an skills and learn rather being in an unhappy job area. They are other job benefit than housing am

in conclusion, In my opinion, it is essential to develop other working abilities than being in lower income scheme because it can restricte other areas for example, not giving for vacation or family gatherings reasons be no savings

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views regarding accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it, and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the ideas are somewhat limited and under-developed, relying on brief examples like company housing and low savings without fully extending the arguments. Furthermore, the response falls short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 231 words. This under-length impacts the overall development of the task and prevents the essay from achieving a higher band score. To improve, you should expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the required word count.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay demonstrates some organizational structure with distinct paragraphs representing the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is frequently hindered by mechanical or faulty cohesion, such as abrupt transitions and referencing issues ('them tend to manage', 'he/her have no whereless to go'). Paragraphing is attempted, but some paragraphs are fragmented or incomplete, particularly the third body paragraph which trails off abruptly ('other job benefit than housing am'). Overall cohesion is inadequate, leading to a choppy reading experience. Using a wider variety of accurate cohesive devices and clearer referencing would significantly improve the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary for the task, with noticeable errors in word formation and choice that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'amnities' instead of amenities, 'negative situations' instead of negative situations (plurality agreement), 'an skills' instead of a skill, and 'restricte' instead of restrict. While there are attempts to use less common items, inaccuracies in collocation and spelling ('whereless', 'for instant') are frequent. To achieve a higher band score, you need to expand your lexical repertoire and ensure greater accuracy in word forms and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writing exhibits a limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent errors in basic and complex sentences alike. There are numerous issues with subject-verb agreement and pronoun usage, such as 'them tend to manage' instead of they tend to manage, and 'he/her have no whereless to go'. Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistently handled, with sentences starting without capital letters. While simple sentences are generally understandable, attempts at more complex structures often result in faulty grammar that can cause difficulty for the reader. Greater control over basic grammatical rules and sentence construction is necessary.

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