Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Humans faces alots of fluctuations in life and a better one is to compete with all situation even if it is good or bad. however, a bunch argue that facing a bad time such as dissapointment, scarcity of wealth, with tolerace is a great way, while others reject it by saying that trying for better and improve the weakness is the key factor to enhance your life. This essay will analyze both these views before any conclusion could be drawn.
The utmost cosideration is that a accepting bad accedents in life and tolerate with it is the best way. such as lose in business, having health problem or disapointment of job accept it. because if we feel misreable and crying so its will not good for our physical and mental health. As a result, it can cause plenty deseases such as depression, anxiety and other physical problem.
The next compelling argue is that some individuals feel that it is bes way to improve our weakness, try best to achieve goal. and never give up. For instance we have to compete with situations and work hard. As a result, it can help to improve individuals self-confidence, motivated, physically and mentally stable.
Moving towards remedies, accepting the reality and tolerate hard time is the best way to avoid physical and mental problem. Moverover competing with different situation and get all yout desire and goals of life.
Following the analyzation of the above points, it is crystal clear that never giving up in life always be confidence, motivated and ready to compete with all situation is a key factor to be healthy, happy and satisfied.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on how to handle difficult situations and providing a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the ideas are relatively undeveloped and lack depth. For instance, the discussion on accepting bad situations is limited to avoiding physical and mental health issues such as 'deseases such as depression, anxiety'. Similarly, the counter-argument is simplistic, relying on repetitive phrases like 'improve our weakness' and 'compete with situations'. The position is clear throughout, but the reasoning is somewhat repetitive across the body paragraphs and the concluding summary. This performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptor, where the task is addressed, but ideas remain limited and under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into five paragraphs, indicating an attempt at structure, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and repetitive points. Transitional phrases such as 'Moving towards remedies' and 'Following the analyzation of the above points' are used awkwardly and do not fit standard academic discourse. Cohesive devices are often inadequate or inaccurate, such as starting sentences with conjunctions or fragments (e.g., 'because if we feel misreable and crying so its will not good'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak due to disjointed sentence structures and a lack of clear referencing. This corresponds to a Band 5 level, showing some organization but lacking clear overall progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples of inaccurate terms and misspellings include 'alots', 'dissapointment', 'tolerace', 'cosideration', 'accedents', 'lose' (for loss), 'misreable', 'deseases', 'bes' (for best), and 'analyzation'. While the student attempts some topical vocabulary related to stress and perseverance (e.g., 'depression', 'anxiety', 'self-confidence'), the high frequency of lexical errors places this response firmly at Band 4, where basic vocabulary is used with errors that frequently strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent, persistent errors in punctuation, capitalization, subject-verb agreement, and word forms. Examples include 'Humans faces alots of fluctuations', 'tolerates with it' (mixed verb form), 'crying so its will not good', and fragment sentences such as 'For instance we have to compete with situations and work hard.' Punctuation is largely neglected, with sentences often beginning without capital letters and clauses incorrectly linked. These widespread errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and align with the Band 4 descriptor.
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