Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to the bad situation some peoples believe that unsatisfactory job or shoratge of money may be accepted but on the other hand some people argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Someimes, peoples have to face difficulties in there practical life they have shortage of money the are hand to mouth in this previeling conditions peoples accept unsatisfactory jobs, because they are in the need of money the prefer difficult job which does not match to there professional standards and not according to there requirments but peoples accept these types of jobs.

But at the same time other peoples argue that it better to try improve these situation, no doubt doing hard and trying to improve these situation may work peoples should be confident on there capabilities should not let them lose hope. Because try to find good opportunities and working hard may work for them to find good jobs offering more money. if peoples will depend on the unsatisfactory job they will lose hope and will not try for a better option they will start depending on that job which is paying less and is not according to there professional standard with this people will also loose interest in there profession there only interest will be a job where they can just earn some money to live there life.

In my opinion, i would prefer to work and try to improve such situation and work hard to achieve goals because there are difficult times in life we should not loose but instead we should work hard to achieve our goals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the task by discussing the views on accepting a difficult situation versus trying to improve it, and the writer provides their own opinion at the end. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For instance, the discussion on why people accept bad jobs focuses narrowly on being hand to mouth and needing money, without expanding further on the broader implications of this choice. Similarly, the counter-argument regarding improving the situation relies heavily on repetitive phrases like 'working hard' and 'lose hope'. While a position is presented, the lack of well-extended supporting arguments keeps the response at a Band 5 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay displays some overall organization with an introduction, body points, and a conclusion, but it suffers significantly from a lack of proper paragraphing and mechanical cohesion. The second and third body paragraphs are exceptionally long, sprawling blocks of text that run multiple ideas together without adequate division. Furthermore, cohesive devices are weak, repetitive, and often misused. Punctuation is largely neglected, resulting in massive run-on sentences such as 'if peoples will depend on the unsatisfactory job they will lose hope and will not try for a better option they will start depending on that job...' which makes progression difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, limited, and frequently repetitive throughout the essay. Words like 'peoples', 'situation', 'job', and 'money' are cycled constantly. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, such as 'shoratge', 'Someimes', 'there' instead of 'their', 'previeling', 'requirments', and 'loose' instead of 'lose'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of employment and financial hardship, the numerous errors in spelling and word choice cause noticeable strain for the reader, aligning with Band 4.5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mainly of simple or heavily tangled complex structures that are consistently faulty. The text is plagued by run-on sentences and comma splices, stemming from a lack of control over punctuation and conjunctions. There are recurrent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('peoples believe', 'peoples have'), incorrect prepositions, and tense inconsistencies. Because complex sentences are attempted but almost invariably flawed, and because errors are frequent enough to regularly impede comprehension, the writing fits the Band 4.5 criteria.

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