Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Few individuals assume that it is good to agree with poor condition such as happy with bad jobs or dificit money while most of the humans thought that every person need to improve his poor situations.

Firstly, in each state lives different types of people and the way of locals thinking are totally different from each other. But some humans are not able to become a successful person due to lack of condidence and lack of energy these types of people are very happy with their circumstances like shortage of money. However, if these kinds of people get a normal job or work then they are very relax with their work so, in which have no working ability because they always like to stand in the same place. For instance, in UK 2009 most of the individuals were too much lazzy and they do not like hardworking but after a few month the governement started a special project in which some people motivated the other locals so at the end every people were became very hardworking.

Secondly, most of the humans are very welleducated or the knowledge change the thinking ability complelety so these people believe that every person needs to improve his condition because every citizens have their own right. Whatever, the right of success is always availibale for all people so the struggle is very crucial thing. If a person leave his jon just for good fututre then this is good thing because the right of progress has all the world.

In my opinion, those people are totally stop only one site this is very wrong and these individuals are happly with lack of money. Furthermore, every single person needs to works hard for his good future so in this situation our government has spome responsibility like provides good jobs or labor work for nation.

In conclusion, if people want a happy life or successful future then they need to work hard then they have a lot of money and some other facilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the task by discussing the views on accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it, and presents a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times repetitive. For instance, the discussion on why some people accept poor conditions relies heavily on vague generalisations about 'lack of confidence' rather than deeply exploring the psychological or economic factors involved. The example provided regarding the UK in 2009 is historically inaccurate and lacks clear relevance to the prompt. While a clear position is discernible, the arguments are underdeveloped, aligning the response with Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs discussing the differing views, a personal opinion paragraph, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is disrupted by mechanical and often confusing cohesive devices. Words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Whatever', and 'Furthermore' are used, but they frequently fail to establish clear logical relationships between sentences. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as 'these kinds of people' or 'those people are totally stop only one site', making it difficult to follow the thread of the argument. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires significant improvement, placing it firmly at Band 5.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is limited and heavily impacted by numerous word-choice and spelling errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples of awkward phrasing and errors include 'poor condition such as happy with bad jobs or dificit money', 'condidence', 'lazzy', 'welleducated', 'complelety', 'happly', and 'spome'. The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive ('some humans', 'poor situations', 'good future'). While the writer attempts to use some less common words like 'circumstances' and 'responsibility', inaccurate collocations and persistent spelling mistakes restrict the score to Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions, alongside attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include 'every people were became very hardworking', 'every citizens have their own right', 'If a person leave his jon just for good fututre then this is good thing', and 'needs to works hard'. Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences lacking appropriate periods or commas. Because errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.

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