Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The various types of situations one of the best ways to increase our life experience because they can easily support in paitents and discipline.

I will discuss both perspectives about unsatisfactorily job or shortage memory and I will give my opinion, which will support my views.

In the beginnings, nowadays a lot of people are suffering in shortage memory because our demand has became more expensive due to new sorts of technologies. Some people rely that, this is the good way to accept a bad situation, if we analyse the entire world system, where a great people facing plenty of challenges in their daily routines because of concise incomes such as, children's educational problems, pay bills, and expensiveness items. Unfortunately due to shortages of money, we can't survive from one point to another point for our purposes.

On the other hand, many people are facing to problem due lower money, our environmental system is suffering various types of diseases such as heartbeat, cancer, and blood pressures, these are common sickness in throughout the world.

This is the second biggest problem for us, this problem is the best ways to enhance knowledge.

According to my point of view, this is the best source to increase our life experience. The different types of problems, a good teacher to resolve our detrimental problems.

the problem experience will support in the our destination country.

To sum up, the problems always with us and this is the important part, which will support in dangerous circumstances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both views regarding whether to accept a bad situation or try to improve it, and provides an opinion. However, the development of ideas is severely limited and frequently unclear. The connection between the prompt and the student's arguments about diseases, heartbeats, and destination countries is difficult to follow. Key terms are confused, such as substituting 'shortage of money' with 'shortage memory'. The position is stated, but the ideas are too disjointed and under-developed to fully satisfy the requirements of the task. Because the prompt asks for a discussion of both views and a personal opinion, the student does touch upon these elements, but the execution remains very weak throughout, fitting the criteria for Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. While some cohesive phrases are attempted, such as 'In the beginnings' and 'On the other hand', their usage is awkward and incorrect. Paragraphing is disjointed, featuring very short, single-sentence paragraphs that disrupt the natural flow of argument. Referencing between sentences is frequently broken, meaning the reader struggles to follow the relationships between ideas. For instance, the transition from discussing money shortages to discussing diseases and health issues happens abruptly without logical links. This overall lack of coherent structure and faulty cohesion aligns with a Band 4.0 score.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. There are major lexical confusions throughout the text, such as writing 'shortage memory' instead of 'shortage of money', 'paitents' instead of 'patience', and 'expensiveness items' instead of 'expensive items'. Other phrases like 'pay bills' and 'concise incomes' show a lack of control over standard collocations and word choice. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and many errors strain the reader's comprehension, preventing the response from reaching a higher band level. This performance corresponds to a Band 4.0 for lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with frequent and intrusive errors that frequently distort meaning. The response relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are almost entirely faulty, such as 'The various types of situations one of the best ways to increase our life experience because they can easily support in paitents and discipline.' Subject-verb agreement errors, incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'suffering in shortage memory', 'rely that'), and missing main verbs are pervasive. There are very few error-free sentences in the entire text. These persistent grammatical inaccuracies and limited structural range place the writing firmly in Band 4.0.

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