Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

new opinion of others thought that stay with the negative situation rather than to improve for the other things

if we talk about todays era people are accepting daily wrost situation with themself. as on the otherside some people move to other place for the better opporunity but some are at the same place. if we talk about the workplace life in starting is good but lately getting more bad or say that worst day by day. as a new person in the working place getting comfortable that was the mistake where they never comes out and beacuse of that situation getting wrost. with that bad day they went to home and getting a overstres, thinking too much which is going to effect their daily life.

that is pertient to accept that less money with comfortable place also with stressful environment. that is the harsh reality of today not to improve themself as well as be as what they are. eventually they not even bother for the right work place or the intrest related place for job. which they gain their brain as well as get more productive on the place.

futhermore, if we talk about get more progessive at new place, meet new people, talk their daily bad momet to being a happy, and try to do new things.

now i want to sum up with never ever be on that place where we not getting respect, all the negativity everywhere, no movitation, as well as just work like a robot. present your self as human being work according to their interest, having a person in life to conversation of daily thing such a bad or good.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding whether to accept a bad situation or try to improve it, and includes a concluding personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times confusing due to expression issues. For instance, the discussion around staying in an unsatisfactory workplace touches upon relevant scenarios like stress and settling for comfort, but the arguments are under-developed and lack clear extension. The prompt asks for a discussion of both views, and while the student mentions both accepting situations and moving to new places, the linkage and exploration remain superficial. The position is somewhat discernible in the conclusion, but the overall lack of fully elaborated main ideas places this response at Band 5.0 according to the task response descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are significantly impacted by unconventional formatting, lack of standard paragraph breaks, and abrupt shifts in focus. The text is largely presented as a single dense block or poorly separated fragments, which hinders the logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used very minimally or inappropriately, such as repetitive transitions ('if we talk about', 'as on the otherside'), making the relationships between sentences and clauses difficult to follow. Referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader to guess the subject of phrases like 'which they gain their brain'. Overall arrangement lacks clear overall progression and structure, aligning closely with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is limited and basic, featuring frequent word choice and collocation errors that often impede communication. Examples include 'wrost situation', 'daily bad momet', and 'overstres'. The vocabulary is repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'bad', 'situation', and 'place'. Attempts to use more complex or less common vocabulary frequently result in unnatural phrasing or incorrect forms, such as 'gain their brain' or 'intrest related place'. Due to noticeable errors and a restricted range of vocabulary that causes difficulty for the reader, this performance corresponds to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures and frequent, heavy errors that often distort meaning. Simple sentences are frequently malformed, and attempts at complex structures result in tangled clauses and missing verbs or subjects, as seen in 'never comes out and beacuse of that situation getting wrost'. Punctuation is largely absent or misused, with lowercase letters beginning sentences and run-on structures that obscure boundaries between thoughts. Frequent errors in tense, agreement, and word formation cause substantial difficulty for the reader, matching the criteria for Band 4.0.

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