Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
While some individuals believe accepting undesireable circumtances ,like an jobless or finacial hardships is the best approach ,others contend that one should strive to overcome and improve these difficulties.
On the one hand, many people believe that accepting current difficulties is the healthiest approach ,as struggling against circumtances beyonds ones control can lead to unnecessary stress . This type of people never be change there conditions just because they do not have enough strength to make changes in life or can change their condition .However there mind always accept the worst condition so they do not step up to change their circumtances.
On the other hand, there are those people who believe that actively trying to improve unsatisfactory situation,like pursuing a new career or finding better financial oppurtunities,is the best way to achieve long-term satisfaction and growth.All about of mind-set of a people they always see oppurtunties so whenever they face finnacial or other type of things they start struggling to get more oppurtunities for their life-style .People who have ability to face hardest phase are never disappoint their self,their mind their body always beside with them and thats why they achieve their goal change or improve such type of hard situations.
In conclusion, both prospective have their own merits ,however actively striving to improve ones circumtances generally lead to greater personal growth and long term satisfaction . But most of the people trying to change their circumtances and some people can do it .
Thus some people are not menatlly ready to face challenges so thats why they give up and accept the bad condition
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on accepting versus attempting to improve bad situations, and provides a clear opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and sometimes repetitive, which places it firmly in Band 5. For instance, the discussion on why people accept bad situations is slightly circular ('This type of people never be change there conditions...'). While the main prompt requirements are covered, the extension of ideas lacks depth and precision. The position is discernible throughout, but the arguments provided to support it remain somewhat underdeveloped and over-generalized, matching the criteria for Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, showing a basic structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs discussing opposing views, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, as well as inaccurate referencing (e.g., starting sentences abruptly with 'This type of people' or 'All about of mind-set of a people'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the final sentences feel tacked on and disrupt the flow. Cohesive relationships between sentences are frequently unclear or repetitive, reflecting the descriptors for Band 5 where organisation is present but lacks smooth overall progression and clear logical flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'unsatisfactory situation', 'long-term satisfaction', and 'mind-set', but these are offset by numerous noticeable errors in spelling, word formation, and word choice throughout the text (e.g., 'undesireable', 'circumtances', 'jobless', 'finacial', 'oppurtunities', 'prospective'). These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede fluent reading. The range of vocabulary is limited to basic and repetitive terms, though it remains minimally adequate to convey the basic gist of the prompt. This performance aligns well with Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to dense, error-ridden constructions (e.g., 'This type of people never be change there conditions just because they do not have enough strength to make changes in life or can change their condition'). Frequent errors in punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency occur throughout, such as missing articles and incorrect verb forms ('mind always accept', 'prospective have their own merits'). These errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 descriptor profile for grammatical range and accuracy.
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