Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Jobs play important role to earn money and for their good future ,a few individuals think that it is beneficial to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money , other hold the opinion that it is best to try and develop such situation i will discuss both views and give my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs
on the one hand ,the supporters of the first view believe that ,it is good to accept a bad situation ,like unsatisfaction and less money because of many reasons,sometime people have many responsibilites of the family and fnaciail problem so because of this they cannot change easily their jobs and lifestyle.some have limited opporunities to do jobs in another fields,sometimes they have less knowlde about them they do work from long time in one jobs,people earn less money but with the help of tjis salary they fullfill their basic needs. it redues stress in some situtions person do not shift to another places and go for long distanct to do job thats by they do job in same places and field and work withunsatisfactory and shortage of money
om the other hand ,the supporters of the second view think that try and improve such situations a good for them because they learn many new skills and gain knowldge about other jobs if someones are unhappy with their jobs they can learn about other fields which are beneficial for them and fnacial condiences when they have a fencial problem to learn another skills then they can stop spending money on unnessary things and buy unusal things rather then they can save money and spend money on develop their skills and for their better future they can lead to successful life with the help of learnig new skills and improve some situation
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that of accepting a bad situation and that of trying to improve it—and provides the writer's own opinion in the introduction. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, especially in the body paragraphs. For instance, the reasons given for accepting a bad situation (family responsibilities, financial problems, lack of opportunities) are mentioned in a long, run-on sentence without sufficient expansion or specific examples. Similarly, the arguments for improving situations are generalized around learning new skills and saving money. While the prompt is adequately answered and a clear position is maintained, the support and extension of ideas remain at a Band 5 or 6 level. Because the response meets the length requirement, the score reflects the adequate coverage of the prompt despite the lack of deeper elaboration.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
Coherence and cohesion are significantly hindered by major punctuation and organizational issues. The entire response essentially consists of just three extremely long, run-on sentences without proper periods or capitalization at sentence boundaries (e.g., starting clauses with lowercase letters like 'on the one hand ,the supporters...'). Paragraphing is attempted with an introduction, one body paragraph for the first view, and another for the second view, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical segmentation. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic (such as 'on the one hand', 'om the other hand'), and the lack of basic punctuation makes the progression difficult to follow. This places the response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for providing distinct paragraphs and basic directional phrases.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words and phrases such as 'bad situation', 'money', 'job', and 'skills'. There are also numerous spelling and word-form errors throughout the text, including 'fnaciail' instead of financial, 'knowlde' instead of knowledge, 'opporunities' instead of opportunities, 'distanct' instead of distance, and 'unnessary' instead of unnecessary. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary items (such as 'responsibilites', 'beneficial', 'unsatisfactory'), the frequent lexical errors and lack of precision in word choice occasionally impede communication and restrict the range. This performance aligns with the Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy are major weaknesses in this response. The text is characterized by an almost complete absence of correct punctuation; sentences are strung together using commas instead of periods, resulting in massive run-on structures. There is a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences lead to severe structural fragmentation and frequent errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('people earn less money but with the help of tjis salary they fullfill...'). Control of punctuation, capitalization, and clause boundaries is weak throughout. Although some simple sentences are intelligible, the frequency and nature of the grammatical and mechanical errors place this clearly in the Band 4.5 to 5.0 range.
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